Hi, I would like to say that you make a good story. I usually make a good horror story but then it's usually not good enough and then quit on my stories because they are ugly. I wish i can write like that. Your story was pretty... touching. I'm sorry about my previous reviews. I just wanted to be a better writer, but instead I caused more harm than good.
Here's my review: Even thought the language is in Bengali, and I don't know the language, I think this story is super good. My reason is because I liked how you introduced the story, about the man leaving from the house and then having his son, Rhea, take care of the home.
When he was trying to be in charge in his house, he also contacted his best friend, Mina. but then in one of his messages, Mina didn't answer.
Then when he was in a situation where his house had a blackout however, he saw his friend Mina, who's in this house as a weird ghost or something, and she became dark, and ended up sending Rhea with him by taking his soul.
I don't know what I hated in this paragraph, because I was too upset at the time... But one of the pet peeves that should be changed for the story is that you should add an english translation of this short story. (It can be here, or in another draft portfolio.) You don't have to do it, but maybe do it, so that, other people other than Bengali language people can understand your story. And not get confused on some of the words. I also got confused with some of the people in the story. Another weird pet peeve question: Is Mina supposed to be a powerful ghost (or god?) or something like that? Because this story (at the ending) has something to do with taking the person's souls to the spirit world.
All in all this story is nice. I like the beggining, middle, and end, and yeah it's about the friendship story of Mina and Rhea, and Mina who then dies, takes Rhea with her as a spirit. This story was sad but it's good once you get the hang of understanding this story. And yeah, translate it when you get the chance. I I cried along the way, understanding this review ( ;-; ) , but now I've cheered up and I hope you like this and give this story some love. From, @BeingRivy.
Points: 865
Reviews: 12
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