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I'm here for a quick review. Before the suggestions, I'm not expert in poetry and I might not be able to go into ity-bity details of what to fix and what could be better.
Our favourite day was the one that we met
Sweet singings of us carried in the breeze
But I cut off all our cords with silence
and I did it cruel
"favourite" is spelled "favorite" in what I know.
Over the suggestion, I love how you write it! The flow is really smooth and it's has calm and in both ways dramatic way about it. It's a beautiful poem and I just really think it was a wonderful time reading this.
You are a wonderful writer!
Thank you for sharing this!
Your Reader,
ChrisDixon
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