Hello there Vampire Lord! Ivory here for a review. Like others before me have said you didn't really establish who the little phoenix is. A child? Friend? You know what I mean. Personally, I saw a child who was being bullied and an adult figure in there life telling them it's going to be okay because they'll one day rise like a phoenix. Maybe if you made a longer poem in order to establish the speaker and the character? However,it did have some pros. My favorite lines were "consume the past" and "brush off the ashes from your glistening feathers". Especially the second one I mentioned, it like rise up from your problems and show the world your beautiful self. Overall,nice poem!
Points: 36
Reviews: 57
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