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Great work! I love the line to line rhyming! I also love the structure of the poem and the simplicity in it's nature! My only wish is that I can feel more desperation in the poem. This could be done by changing some of the words, primary in the second line of each stanza. To give it a little more punch! I am loving your work so far, you have a true talent!
Aooow, This is soo cute! I think many people can relate too! It was written in a simple form with primary and secondary rhyming and even though all rhymes didn't seem to come naturally none of them seemed too forced either! Nice job!
Good Luck & Keep Writing
// Demoness
aw,what a cute and loving poem.i liked how you expressed how you feel in such short verses and whst you wish happens. the rhyming from line to line was good,it then got towards the middle and it stopped,but the choice of words stepped in for it so great job:)