Terms and Conditions

HELLO THERE! THIS IS MEMORYHUNTER~

So I like the idea you have here with the terms and conditions and things. I love works that focus on friendship because I can relate to them a lot, compared to those of love, which is quite ironic considering I make romantic poems frequently. The idea of this poem is very authentic and raw that it managed to strike my veins more than I thought.

Here are some suggestions for you to ameliorate your poem.

1. Stanzas

The poem will be more organized because as of now, it just seems like a long blob of stuff. Of course, there are different sizes of a poem and different styles too, and I get that there are one stanza-poems that exist in this world. However, this would have been more pleasing to the eyes plus the rhythm would be better, if you had separated them into more stanzas.

2. A variety in punctuation

Try semi colons, dashes, everything. Heck, you can even add an interrobang if you like. Also, you might want to improve your punctuation. I might not be the right to one to say this because obviously, I suck at the field. But I just wanted to point it out. For example,

And now that I see you for your real self

I refuse to accept

The terms and conditions

That you applied

I love the idea of terms and conditions and an asterisk.

You loved every second of every minute and I think we can all relate.

Friendship is something special, but as your poem portrays can quickly become something more dangerous.

Your poem flows freely.

It feels natural.

I like it.

Keep writing!

Very good poetry, keep writing.

Peace and Love and Empathy

MVP

Hey fangirldivergent46!
So this was a great work by you because thoughts flowed like feelings. Like what you feel. The title was incredible and what a thought girl!
And truly it sometimes feel like friendship is taken by some people for granted!
Anyways, do add more punctuations in your poem because it is very important for a poem to have punctuation marks.
"And though I had known you for
Like 13 days, it felt like 13 years."
Over here, i think u should remove either like in second line or change the line a little because like is breaking the flow.
Overall the poem was good!!
I loved it. And
"And now that I see you for your real self
I refuse to accept
The terms and conditions
That you applied "
Favourite lines.
Keep writing !!
Your bestie
~bookoholic22

Amazing! This is the word I can use for your poem. Its is the mirror actually of words. Situations which we can relate to in real.nothing to criticise but many reasons to say thanks for you write such a nice piece that I hardly resist reading again n again. Though I can also relate it to self. Sometimes a day seems like a year long.
Hope to read many many more.
Loved it truly, heartily
Blessings!

This is a great poem because of how it relates to the real world. People tell not to be with some because they say he/she is "Trouble" or "Will break your heart", but you listened to your heart and head and went for it. However, then the person betrays you and you realized your friends were right. This is just how reality is and you feel like you can no longer trust people you hang out with, until your friends come and help you. You are the best writer i've ever read and loved the symbolisms you used in your poem.

Hope to read more from you, Kman134.

I loved this so much!

I really liked this poem because it had a lot for true things in it and all those things relate to reality.One of the things I would like to point out is that you are one of the best writers that I have read today.Also I would like to point out is that this one of the things that do relate to reality,like when you said when people warn you about things and you don't pay attention to them,and that is true because if you don't know what the people are how will you know what they are like.Thanks for writing this poem and keep writing them.

Hello! I am HavenBuzz, and this is a review for you.

First off, I can tell your story is filled wth voice, which is a very good thing in any piece of writing. Though at times, I feel like it was to 'voice-based' and less poetic. an example of this is;

"And though I had known you for (((comma can be used)))

Like 13 days, it felt like 13 years."

I feel the word 'like' upsets the flow of the poem. I find 'about'or 'only' tend it fit better in the terms of story telling, and also tend to show the reader that the writer knows what he/she is doing, rather than showing them the writer doesn't care.

also, at times, I noticed that you tend not to use any punctuation when is makes sense to use it. examples;

"Yes, I sincerely loved (comma)

The way we laughed and fooled around" (period can be used to end this line)

"Yes, something felt off that day" (B in the next line is line is not supposed to be Capitalized and a comma can be used)

"Yes, they warned me about you (comma)

But I ignored them" (period)

At the end of these lines (and more that were not mentioned), you were able to use commas and/or periods to help create the flow you want in a poem, instead of making the reader re-read those lines and read them slower to try and find where the pause between thoughts is, and incorporate them themselves.

*Keep Writing*