The Bullies Can Eat It

Wow! Did the bullies really left you after you gave them this? Not that your writing isn't good, but I didn't think bullies could be defeated by giving them messages. Anyway, good for you?

I love the second stanza, especially the last lines "And you've crossed the line into MY world, of paper, pen and ink". Ha! Writers unite! And your expressions are really good.

Overall, good one! keep it up!'

Mysticalxx

Awesome! I really liked this poem. The humor was there, had me laughing a bit, as well. The last two lines were my favorites. Perfect! This poem was cleverly put together, effectively holding my attention. Plus, I like the fact that you're standing up to the bullies in your own way, which evidently proves to be effective. Nice job!

When I read this, I hear a beat and backing track playing in my head, something like The devil went down to Georgia.

And that part about swearing until their throats dry up.

I've theorized that one of the many reasons that kids swear (being brought up in it, not knowing a better alternative, etc) is that swear words have a special weight to them.
An emphasis, a force, a power.

But the problem with swear words is that because of these reasons, they are overused.
Rendering the users unoriginal and cliched.

Anyone can swear.

But professional, mature and original writing is something you practice and learn.
As you say, they can swear and swear until their throats dry out, but your skills will be capable of something new and original every time.

The point of my theory is that using professional writing/dialogue skills has the potential to scare people with malnourished imaginations who only repeat swear words by hitting them with something they do not understand and may never possess.

Thanks for the laugh.

Hello!

Bullies really are good subjects for lovely poems such as this. I've also written some. This one is very good: it has the right attitude and very, very cool vibe. You write beautifully, and that bully really can suck this up.

It feels great reading and writing poems like this. I'm glad you wrote it, it just shows how strong you are no matter how weak those bullies think you are. I love the way how you make that bully look like: a brainless piece of sh*t. I think all bullies are.

You are not just a great writer for writing this, but also a great person for standing up against a bully. Good job.

This poem inspired me to post a song I wrote, also about bullies.

Keep writing!

I love this. It's clever, funny, and has a wonderful rythym.
The last line was a great fanish, and it was clear and easy to read and understand. The words flowed so perfectly!
Neko
Keep writing!!!

I love this. It's clever, funny, and has a wonderful rythym.
The last line was a great fanish, and it was clear and easy to read and understand. The words flowed so perfectly!
Neko
Keep writing!!!

I agree that this is clever. And I've written a few notes like this in my life. This is better than all mine. Isn't poetry such a great way to insult people? Shakespeare did it, now you are carrying on the tradition.

I really like your rhyme scheme and your rhythm.
At first I wasn't sure what the first line meant, but now I understand that it's in response to the note. I really like the second stanza because you state that this is the area of your expertise where (I don't know you but) you may not be able to fight physically or even verbally, but when it comes down to writing, you will squish them like the bugs they are. Your defiant tone is really quite pronounced and strong. I like it.

And the last line is perfect.

I dig it. It's simple. It's clear. It's clever. YES.

Absolutely amazing!!! It served them right! I just wish I had enough courage to say that to the people who bully me! It's well written and surprised you came up worth it on the fly! I LOVE the last two lines!

Can I just say again that I just Love this poem, cause I do! Hehehehehe my friends love it !

DUDE! NIIIIEEEEECCCCCEEEEE!Serves them right, no one likes a bully! "The pen is mightier than the sword" . I bet they were irritated! only thing I caught was where you said "Of paper, pen and ink" you forgot a comma but I think that was just a typo. Bravo to you ! I think this is a nice and empowering poem overall.
All I can say is that you have potential, keep it up!

Would you mind if I showed your poem to a couple of my friends ( giving you TOTAL credit for the brillience of course)? I think they would enjoy reading it a lot!

BRILLIANCE! BRILLIANCE! Can I meet you, seriously. I am not joking. Okay, maybe that would be a little tricky to do...but this poem has absolutely zero flaws! The confidence is literally surging towards me as I read this. Wow. Really, I have no words. So many people need to read this poem, it has so much meaning to it. Half of the poems I have read by professional authors don't even express this much meaning....I am being truthful! You have potential...most definitely.
Toodles.

Fantastic! Absolutely fantastic! I loved the third stanza especially, that's where a fantastic point is made. (Whether you mean for me to get this or not...) A person who thinks that cussing makes him/her stronger is fooling nobody but him/herself. If someone resorts to swearing they are simply saying that they are incapable of coming up with a more descriptive, unique word to describe their actions or feelings. Thus, making those who "swear until their throats dry up" as you put it, compared to the ones that deliver concise, unique language, are the idiots.

You're never beating me

Because let us not forget the girl
Who beat you with a pen.

This is so cool. Liked it all he way through...

All I can say about this is... F@CK YEAH!!!!!!

This is brilliant! I was laughing all the way through!