I have never experienced what is feels like to Cyberbully someone.
I am glad and I never will.
I have never experienced what it feels like to be Cyberbullied.
I am glad, and I hope I never will be experienced.
But my friend has.
Life is life.
Is it good or bad?
I am not sure.
But I know that it comes with pain.
Why do we hurt each other?
Give me a good reason.
I will tell you how much it hurt my friend.
Some days I walk with her.
She tells me how she felt.
That person bullied her for a really long time.
Maybe she forgave that person;
it doesn't mean she's fine.
Her family is a perfect, happy family.
Why do people have to ruin it?
She is one of the nicest people I ever met.
She walks with me, and would ask me if I know how it feels.
No, I say.
She says I am lucky, and she says don't follow the wrong path, then I might become one.
I take her advice, and I will keep it.
Don't be a Cyberbully.
It really hurts, that's what my friend says.
Just because people where jealous of her,
she had good clothing, nice home, had many things.
I don't care.
She is awesome, she may have these things, but she has a kind heart.
She cares for me,
so I cared for her back.
Tears, sobs, and wails.
They don't even realize.
Its ok, I tell her.
She is my best friend.
Don't be a Cyberbully.
I am so lucky, she always says.
I know, I answer.
I don't ever want any part of the word Cyberbully, I am glad I never did.
Never, after how I saw how much pain it put my friend through.
So put yourself in her shoes.
Understand the pain.
Before she told me I didn't even know the word existed.
Well, it does.
So why?
Why, do we hurt people so much?
Friends and family are like a chain that can't be broken.
But when you cyberbully someone you smash that chain.
Don't you realize what you are doing, Cyberbullies?
Sometimes my friend walks with me,
in the rain,
in the sun.
She says the rain keeps on pouring,
but then I shine through to help her.
So that rain can't stand the darkness, so it runs away.
Farwell, friends.
I must leave, the sun is waiting for me.
Beware of the rain,
it strikes when it can,
says my friend.
Beware of the rain.
{Authors note: my friend, really was Cyberbullied by someone. It is true, that I have never been a cyberbully(gladly) and I was never Cyberbullied. (gladly) And I never will be. I wrote this to tell the Cyberbullies in this world to stop, I can't bare to watch my friends get Cyberbullied. So please tell this to friends, and tell them to send the message on, so hopefully this world will be a better place for everyone.}
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What a positive message! It is a nice poem. In one part, however, you wrote "dose" when it is supposed to be "does". There is a grammatical error.
"She is one of the nicest people I ever meet" (met)
Again, it is such a positive message. I really wish that people would just be kind to each other. Then will the world really be at peace. I admire your moral very much.
Good luck and keep writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Very truly yours,
fantasydragon01
thank you!
Hi there!
Wow, what a powerful poem! This is a really strong message about a really strong topic - and I'm so sorry your friend was cyber bullied. I'm glad you're there to be her sun though
So, first of all, there are quite a few grammatical errors, which just look like a couple typos of typing so fast. I'll give you a few, then maybe you can find the rest yourself.
*met
It*
Also, this line doesn't seem as powerful as it could be. It's just a simple line. Perhaps you could use a metaphor, like you did at the end? Because when I read this, I just felt, Okay, so, she's hurt.... Make me feel sad for her, make my heart stop. Make me feel like I'm in her position. Strengthen this.
Those were just a few - now onto the actual poem structure.
I really think this would be better in stanzas. Since it's so long and there are parts that don't really connect together [I'm not sure how to word this] I think it would be much better in stanza form. And you also don't have to center it - just aligning it to the left is fine.
Besides the nitpicks and the format, this was awesome. Just try and work on making it even more powerful. It didn't give as much of the 'Wow' factor as I'd like (I still went wow, but make me go WOW).
My favorite part was the metaphor at the end, when you were talking about the rain and the sun. That was very beautiful.
Great job! Keep writing,
~ EternalRain
Thanks!