Young Writers Society

hiya here to review :3

here's how i interpreted the poem:
from what i cant tell, you compared people to cockroaches and then used the fear of insects to show humanity's fear of itself. i really like the idea! reminds me of that kafka story, metamorphosis.

my only real criticisms are with language, i think the transition here:

under their doors and floors.

They used to lock their doors

worshipping the blind light
of unlit candles.

hey @Buranko i im here to give you a short review cause now i see it is your poem is so short

So we going to get started!

First off Buranko you did pretty well on the poem and editing and actually the poem only had 3 lines i im telling you that cause the poem is so short you barely can't read the poem like that cause its to short but by the way its still a good poem Buranko and Excellent for making a poem about history

My compliment is Buranko what makes you wanna do a short poem like this anyway i im just saying cause i thought it was longer than that but i guess it was only 3 Buranko but the poem was totally epic

How you can improve is writing more than just 3 little sentences cause to me a poem would be longer than i expected but it was more than just that by the way you was suppose to make it more than that just 3 sentences but just write more than just that the next time you write a poem

Keep Writing @Buranko!!

-Jay

good job

Nice poem!