I am only one of billions
Can he see me?
I am only a fruitless tree,
yet I receive his love.
I am not a flawless soul,
I have not had a huge role .
Would the world be the same
If my soul never came?
He is the shepard,
but I am no special lamb.
His love engulfs me,
and influences me to believe.
Even though I am not special,
I will always be his child.
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Beautiful! <333
Hey Boo
Nice poem you've got here. It made me smile, and I wanted to reassure the narrator that, "Yes, He does hear you, honey."
I did have a few issues with the poem itself though.
So that's the short version. Those are just some suggestions, but you should try to improve on this one, it's beauty could shine brighter.
I'm not hugely religious, but I found this sweet. I don't have a lot to complain about; it was simple, and I liked it for that simplicity; it added an innocence that was really warm and nice to read.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver