Bitter Sweet- Chapter Three

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Merry_Haven
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Holly-
Sorry if i didn't review that last chapter, I was to busy immersed in this story.
There were only two things that stood out to me.
1) This chapter in the beginning didn't start where it left out from chapter two. Instead where Mae is with her mom. I was just wondering what happened between those two chapters.
2) I was right! Or somewhat right. When I said that Mae was a metamorphosis, I'm totally sure she is. And especially her mom. With her mom changing in the basement, there's something weird going on.
Nothing much I'm going to say, 'cause I'm totally intriugued into this story.
-Merry

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KailaMarie
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oooOOoooOOooohhh. that's intense. the guy in her dream she was talking to was Wiley, right? lol.

“No,” I sobbed, my voice nearly out of order. “I couldn’t.”

i liked this phrase.


see me flattened like a pancakes.

im assuming you meant pancake?



I would be a terrible novel protagonist.
— mellifera