Pickles are life

I love your poem. You must right me a poem. Can you tell me more about your love for pickles? I haven't found any errors because I love your poem. So do you wanna right a poem for me? I would love one.

This truly brings out the beauty of pickles.

Hello Bambi!
(Cute name by the way! <3)
It's MergSword here with a review for you.

This is a really cute poem. I mean pickles, who doesn't love a poem about pickles! Actually, I don't like pickles in real life but hey a poem about pickles I do like.
There are many poems on YWS about food though, and it's usually considered a cliche thing to write about, but hey this poem is funny and goofy!
That is one sexy pickle: Um-er- I would change that (funny) line. I don't think it's really a good thing to call a food sexy
You repeat the words,"green" and "yummy" a lot. I think you could be a bit more descriptive about a pickle.
You should capitalize that title.XD
It's great to be humorous, stay cool!
~MergSword

Haha. c: This is cute - weird, maybe, but it's goofy and silly and... cute.

It could use some polishing up, but I'm not sure if you actually do want to polish it up or not (this just looks like something your wrote when you were extremely bored and had nothing else to do). Nevertheless, I'm giving you feedback anyway! Muahahhhaaaha.

Okay, so, it did feel a little generic and I think some more poetic words would do, and instead of just repeating "green" and "yummy", maybe adding a few more descriptive words in there. So - think of something other than green that could describe a pickle... maybe a metaphor or simile? "A type of green, the same color as an alligators skin" or something like that could work (you might want to change that simile, though... xD it's kinda bad). What I'm saying is, it could just be a bit more poetic.

But other than that it seemed good and served its purpose: to be silly. Keep writing!

~ EternalRain

PS Maybe capitalize the title? Ahaha.

PICKLES!
This is cute. I actually commend you for being able to write a super simple, funny poem. I, myself cant write things that aren't overly emotional so nice job haha..I loved the way you ended it off instead of just repeating the word pickle one more time or something like that.
Theres not really room for much reviewing, give the whole style and topic of the poem...
However, I'd like to make a suggestion. I think if you took this poem and ,made it dramatic (almost like your whining about your love for pickles), it would make it so much funnier. Granted, it would make the poem 110% ridiculous but I guess that's the point right? haha...Anyway, yeah I think maybe even talking about the pickle like its a person would be super funny and great for the poem...but um thanks for the laugh. Cute poem

.....what? Just.... what?

Kidding. You really meant it, didn't you, when you said you were bored and avoiding your other works?

Well, it's cute and silly; I'll give you that. I can't really evaluate it artistically, because, well, you know... not sure you were looking for reviews anyway It did have a nice little recitation book rhythm to it... like something kids who are learning to read would perform in school. This seems appropriate, given the subject matter.

Well, I suppose kids wouldn't find the line "That is one sexy pickle" in their recitation books... though that would be hilarious!

I feel prompted to share a similar thing I wrote about tomatoes when I was about 12 or 13 - you might like it. I put it to song:

Tomatoes, tomatoes, tomatoes
Are green...
Tomatoes, tomatoes, tomatoes
Are yellow...
Tomatoes, tomatoes, tomatoes
Are red!

If you don't like tomay-aytoes
That's OK, because...
I'll tell you why:

Buyable
Packable
Save-able
Snackable
Tomay-aytoes!

If you don't like tomay-aytoes
That's OK, because...
I do.

Pass the tomatoes, please!