imaginary freind

I read this to my seven year old nephew just a bit ago. He woke up from a nightmare. He now is sleeping again with a smile one his face. So thank you. I think you just made a very grumpy boy very happy. Its a very cute poem.

Awwww this is adorable, and actually pretty clever. However, there are a few spelling errors that you need to correct; "freind" should be "friend" and "ware" should be "wear". There isn't enough punctuation either, like commas and stuff. Make your you add them in somewhere.

Keep up the writing, and kindness to your little brother.

HI Awsome I love your poem it was awsome hahaha

Hi this is Em101cats!



Aww, it's soooooo sweet you would make a cute little poem for your little brother! This is a cute little poem and it's silly, (in a good way), happy, and everything a kid like your brother would want. Poems about imaginary friends are, like, the BEST child poems EVER.


You did a great job, and although you are missing some rhymes on some lines, the rhyming is a great touch to the poem to make it more kid-friendly. (Not that it wasn't in the beginning.)


You did miss some apostrophes in some places, for example: hes should have been he's. And there are some misspellings, but otherwise, this poem is great work!

Congrats, you were also creative. I hardly see imaginary friend poems on this site or anywhere else!

Keep up the great thinking. I hope your little brother enjoyed or enjoys this, and that so does or did everyone else. You did great. Congrats!
~Em101cats

Hai! Laure for a review! I always love poems to do about imaginary friends, even thou I have never had one I ink they are the best part of childhood, provided that your friend isn't some evil murderer's kid from the 80's. Anyways, I just like the fact you have decided to write a positive and cheery poem for your little brother! Is such a wonderful thought!

I really don't like criticizing this, so I will keep it to a minimal. I don't like criticizing positive poems, is like I'm condemning happiness itself. So, I can see that you tried to rhyme this poem. The rhyming is pretty sparse, so I would recommend you to try and rhyme it the whole way through or not at all. Since this is written for a kid, is better to rhyme it because it brings out the funess and it adds pace to the poem.

I also noticed that you didn't develop this poem, you really should but it has the potential of being a great poem. Just after line four, you could describe his talent.

'wares' should be wears.

After line eight, you could once again perhaps describe his personality or his cheeky grin as he asks for candy.

'I like him, he likes me.' You lacked a comma there.

So, basically try and expand this a little. Watch your spelling and the apostrophes, because nearly all of them were missing in this poem. No matter what you're writing. Grammar is still very important.

Overall, this is a really nice poem with a wonderful message, I wish you would develop it more though.

Kudos!

-Laure

I like how some parts rhyme, then others don't. The topic of your poem is good, too. But if you did want to improve on it, I suggest you make it a bit longer.

Okay, as in your description you were trying to cheer up your little brother? Good job, this poem is very heartwarming and silly (in a good way).

There were a few mistakes I sought out—like you wrote hes when it should be he's, and you didn't add a comma in a certain spot.

Its a very cheery little poem though, and its cute and unique.

Great job, I love it!

~ WillowPaw1