Hey little girl
look up from your phone
And look in the mirror
What do you see?
Do you see obesity
Do you see fat?
Do you see ugly?
Or do you see pretty?
Because little girl
That is what you are
So look up from your phone
And look in the mirror
Because your pretty
Yes pretty
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Hey little girl
Take off that stuff
You call makeup
And go natural
Let me see your face
Empty
Let me see your face free
Because to me
You just look so pretty
So take off that makeup
And look up to me
And show me who you are
little girl
Show me pretty
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Hey little girl
Do you like the way you dress?
I don’t
Because you hide
Behind those robes
You call a “dress”
You hide behind your bangs
Because you don’t care
Well I care
So let your hair flow free
And let your body show
Because you are pretty
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Hey little girl
Do you know who you are?
Can you see what I see?
Can you see through that makeup?
Can you see through those robes?
Of course you can’t
So take it off
Take it all off
And show me
Show yourself
Show the world
Who you are
little girl
Show what you are
Because you are pretty
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Hey there! It's ZeldaIsShiek here to review another quintessential piece of literature that made my day and win this Review Day by helping the Red Pandas stay in first place and reaching my goal of 80 reviews. I might even get to 100, if I work hard enough. Anyway, that's enough idle chatter from me. Let's get into the review.
This poem struck me as being about a girl who thinks she is fat and spends a lot of time trying to get others to like her because she feels that that is the only way for her to be accepted as a good person or a person worthy of others' attention. This is an important message to give to kids today, as if they do not see themselves for who they are, their falseness will damage their true beauty. I could tell that the speaker of this poem was older or more mature than the "little girl" who they, presumable he (I don't want to assume, as they could be female) thinks is pretty. My theory on this is that they are calling her a "little girl" because they have the realization that how popular you are is not an accurate representation of who you really are, and it is not worth comparing yourself to others. Anyway, that is just what I think about this poem. The writing and flow of this poem was pretty good, so I don't feel the need to correct you on anything.
That's all for today, and keep writing, my friend. Happy Review Day!
~ZeldaIsShiek
I love this! Very powerful
Thanks!!
I love this! I actually struggle a lot with self-image and other's perception of me, and this was done amazingly! I love the wording, flow and repetition.... Great job!
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Wow, very bold and inspirational. Loved it!
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i LOVE this. I love seeing positivity on here and I hate to admit it but most of the poems on here are depressing AF. I love seeing body positivity and I'm sure you made so many peoples day by writing this. it just seems so genuine and kind and a lot of girls don't hear that from friends or loved ones. it's so nice to see someone going out of their way to make someone's day brighter! I also love how its open to interpretation, in the reader's minds we fill in all the blanks and that makes it more special. Keep writing my dude!
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I love this so much.
Thank you!!
Nice poem with a lot of repetition for emphasis. Yet, I have no idea how the girl looks nor why the speaker considers her pretty. So instead of repeating that she is pretty. I would dedicate far more effort into describing the reasons why I consider her pretty. Provide the reasons why she should not mar her natural beauty by using makeup.
I wanted who ever was reading to decide what made the girl pretty in their own opinion and to decide what natural beauty is in their own opinion. Because my pretty may not be someone else%u2019s pretty. Thank you for the review though!!
~Cheers!!