Hey! This poem kinda confusing when reading it. I must say it has a nice flow and the rhyming pattern was good until the end. Now for a few details you might have missed during editing. In the 3rd line the 5th word is you but should be your. The next one is the 9th line and the 2nd word is head's but should be heads. If I was reading it right I kinda assumed that death was the writer's interest? I don't know for sure. I thought maybe it was a human, but the title is misleading. It doesn't make that much sense to me and I thought you could have stuck through with your rhyming pattern. But this is a good topic to expand and write more so....Keep writing <3
Sarah24
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