Big Creatures

by Ardor

Published September 4, 2012

In Death By Sound

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They tower over me
They're so goddamn big
Larger than I had
Originally thought
Someone says to me
"You better run, sir"
Of course I have to run
From the big creatures

Some curiosity
Kills momentum
I have to run
Kills momentum

Some curiosity
Kills momentum
I have to run
From the big creatures

They tower over me
They're so goddamn big
Larger than I had
Originally thought
Someone says to me
"You better run, sir"
Of course I have to run
From the big creatures
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Renard
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Renard wrote a review Review · Jun 30, 2014

Hello.
XD
Compared to some of your later works this could be seen as rather immature, but on the same note, the childlike nature of the song is what I find endearing about it. XD

Some curiosity
Kills momentum
I have to run
Kills momentum


You do this sort of thing now in your more recent works, so it's interesting to see what patterns you follow in your writing. XD

On the whole, this work marks the foundation of your writing voice:

"You better run, sir"
Including speech in your writing is a trademark of your style. As an elementary work, I liked this one. :)

Love you. :D

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KylaThompson
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KylaThompson wrote a review Review · Feb 22, 2013

Hello, my name is Kyla and I'm new to YWS. Just here leaving you a review. I like it, I think it is nice. I was a little confused though why it had repetition though. I was also a little thrown off by your punctuation too. I still like it though, I will have to read and review more from you! :)

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mihaivisan
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mihaivisan wrote a review Review · Sep 4, 2012

I like its symmetry. although it's the same thing that makes you practically read it twice without actually intending to do so. so by the time I finished reading it twice, I had practically read it four times haha. funny!

not enough for me to review on this one. maybe it's just a glimpse of something bigger?

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Bobbywalker
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Bobbywalker commented Comment · Sep 4, 2012

Friggin cool dude! Love this one xD That project of yours is awesome!



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