Hello there. Popping by to give you a review and get this work out of the Green Room.
I haven't read the other chapters in this, but let's see where I can get with this.
Starting off, I'm curious as to whether Joker's possessive nature in this chapter marks him as the antagonist of this story - judging by the main character being a reader insert. I'm putting this article here by @OverEasy on Antagonists and Villains to maybe help you expand on Joker's many sides as a character. This almost sounds like the reverse of how Harley Quinn had been portrayed to be obsessed with Joker when in turn, it sounds like he is the one hunting over the main character.
In addition, I want to address the actual reader insert and say that even with this being a fanfiction, I'd rather have an actual name to better actually connect with this story, but maybe that's just my preference. I'm curious as to why you choose an insert instead of a name that readers can pretend to be that way? Either way, I think that's a different part of this story.
One final point is that I think I would like either longer chapters or a more drawn-out scene, as in having more descriptions and establishing a clearer tone. Here, we're kind of thrust into Joker's mind with kind of weird lines such as "I'm fuming" which seemed like a weird thing for someone to refer to themselves as doing? I think that's one issue that comes from the first person is that describing actions and emotions comes in a more complicated manner.
That's all for now!
. I like that though. I don't have anything to suggest, really. I only noticed that one word was misspelled, and that is the word "prise." It should be "Prize." 
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