The Sterling Knight

Sorry but putting this out right now. This is not a review I will not be critiquing you what so ever. Simply commenting alright. Your picture along with the poem is perfect it matches the poems paces like a boss. Is this a pic you took or found on the internet?

The poem had a almost haunting tone of who is the knight? your word choice while simple was brilliant and tied everything up quite nicely.

This is a piece of work that you can keep re-reading and always think something different and the cool thing is this has taken the place of my favorite piece of work, all apologize to egar allen poe later.

Lastly, keep bloody writing cause you are bloody fantastic

I love it when people use pictures, it's such a rare thing but really looks amazing. I personally would have resized the picture to make it a little smaller because it doesn't all fit on my screen at once. But it doesn't matter because it's the poem we're here for.
And I looove the poem! The imagery is amazing. The words you used are seem sort of fantasy/medieval themed which cements the story. I can imagine this being a legend which would be read to a child at their bedtime.
I love the line 'Hands paint the field in gore'. It shows what is happening. Plus you've matched the photo with it- using the bloody hands theme.
I love this poem! Well done.

Helloo, MargoSeuss! It's Brunnera here. This is going to be quite a short review, so forgive me for this.

Anyway, your imagery in here is flawless. The language you used actually has that kind of old-style theme to it, which is enchanting and fitting to the theme of a knight in a medieval setting.

Your poetry flow is smooth, steady and revised. It's all well-done. Each word is nicely chosen, each line beautifully constructed, each stanza pleasant to the ears. (I read poetry aloud xD)

I like how you have added the picture to go with the work. I think the beauty of the woman in it is stunning. It also creates that mystery and curiosity which is, I think, the main theme of your poem.

I'm not sure if you've noticed this, but... "The Sterling Knight" has a different spelling from the title of your work, which is "The Stirling Knight".

Anyway, good job. Your works are always a pleasure to read.

~Brunnera

Knight Dragon, here to review!

That was a very intriguing poem. I came into it expecting an answer to the question, but got the question itself. I liked how you had an image at the end of the poem. I know I've found myself trying to fit stories to images I see (especially ones set to epic music soundtracks). So a bit of a kindred spirit there.

There were a few minor flow issues that rumpled the reading flow, though.
For example:

Screams of beast and man

Haunt skies smudged with war

Armour a whirling grace

Hands paint the field in gore

A suit possessed by God

A star to ensnare the dark

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That was totally dang awesome!!!!!! I love your metaphors and your picture that you put!!!!!!! I was picturing the Sterling Knight as a man (Kinda sexist of me, I know), so the picture came as a bit of a shock to me. Such is life. Great work, MargoSeuss! (By the way, I love your username!!!!!!!!!!!!!) You should do more poems like this because they really make people feel emotions. It's like you feel really excited and tense, then all of a sudden you're cheering. Great job!!!!

Hi MargoSeuss.

I just want to say, right off the bat; I love this. It's truly amazing.

However, the fact this is in a single stanza style is somewhat monotonous. It's continuity is too long, but maybe that's just me.

Maybe try two stanza's of eight lines each with a single final stanza of four lines, or five stanza's of four lines each. This not only increases the tempo of the poem but also increases the poem's action intensity; and it increases the users interest, as it will actually seem shorter than one long stanza.

What I like in particular is the contrast you create with the following lines:

"A suit possessed by God
A star to ensnare the dark
The feet march not from Hell
But from the wings of lark"

Its a forcefully subtle contrast, comparing God and hell in line one and three, and yet comparing dark and lark, in the sense that a lark is quite the opposite to something dark, even if it is the dark itself.

Also, a good way to introduce a nicely timed dramatic offset would be to place a semicolon at the end of "By the one adorned in light" and a hyphen at the end of "Their thanks a symphony".

Overall though, I really enjoyed it. It's my type of poetry.