Hello.
O-kay then. Interesting how you have snow in the actual words and I feel like I'm critiquing a snowflake because of the visual you've drawn up here.
Surprisingly, it's legible despite the broad spacing between everything. You managed to get a good flow for the stanzas, or maybe it'd be best to call them "clumps", themselves, with each line falling into the next quite nicely.
As for the content itself.
It's pretty blatantly about racism but I read it differently than racism against blacks, but instead racism against Native Americans. The nature imagery with the snow aids this, and I actually found the blood on snow metaphor clever instead of overdrawn.
The one thing that bothers me is "shades of green", because it doesn't tie back into any of your previous imagery. It brought to mind copper, because copper starts off red and turns green as it ages, but that doesn't make sense because blood gets its red colour from iron and oxygen interacting. So in my mind silver or blue would make sense because those both reference iron and tie into blood more strongly; blue would especially make sense because the term "blue blood" actually comes from racism back in Spain: the Moors were black Africans while the Spanish were mostly white, and therefore you could see blue veins on the Spanish but not the Moors.
Overall, I actually kinda liked this. It's simple, visually striking, and isn't tackling racism I see very often. My one thing is, as I said, the word green.
Hope this helped. Let me know if you have any questions or comments.
~Rosey
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