This is a somewhat brief poem, but I still think you were able to capture a lot of emotion in it. That being said, I think you need to expand more on it, maybe on the lion and eagle parts. Breaking it into stanzas would also help.
I do like the repetitiveness of it, but if the in between lines had a bit more substance, I think I'd like the repetitiveness more; when half the poem is repeating words, it gets a little much. Besides that, it's a nice poem. I hope this review helped. Happy Memorial Day weekend!!!
-alliyah
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