All I Want

I like that it's clear that the relationship is toxic and not good for this person, and they admit that, and they even explain how it's toxic: the empty promises, trying to forgive them all and move on. I like this because it's a realistic situation and especially the end gives hope to people stuck in the same place.

I wonder how you'd feel if the song had some more specifics in it, though.

Not about the broken promises or the words these people say, but maybe some physical sights or images? When you put in a concrete image, it kind of spreads automatically to the whole poem to make it take on a new level of reality. A kid who makes broken promises is like an "idea", but a kid who makes broken promises and wears red sneakers he colored on when he was younger seems more like a "person" than an idea, right? So just slipping in one little detail might go a long way to making this feel like a person talking to a person instead of an idea talking to an idea, and give us a more grounded song. Do you think so?

I also feel like you might need some more meat on your verses? Obviously, I don't know how the verses sound compared to the chorus, but they seem really short, and having the chorus with more meat and repeated over and over could make the song feel like it's all chorus. So~

Hope these thoughts are helpful to you!
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Good luck and keep writing!

Hannah

Hello, Talia! Night here to review!

First off, wow. I really loved this. These are lyrics? Do you have a song to go with them? In my mind, I heard it as a pop-ish song. I really liked it. My favorite part was;

"But we're a time-bomb waiting to explode

And take everything in our way

We are toxic, but I can't get enough

And I just can't walk away."