Hey there. Review for you.
I really enjoyed reading this poem, just because of the way you conveyed the narrator's emotions and thoughts about the complicated relationship they are in. It's almost as if they're making a futile appeal to their significant other about how this relationship is negatively affecting them. I love the phrase you employed about being "trapped between pages." I interpreted this as if the relationship were a book, and the narrator is trying to get the most out of it (I.e the words) but is literally trapped between the pages without anything to convince them to stay motivated towards continuing it. I'm a sucker for romantic elements, so I thought this was really nice. Possibly my favorite part of this poem is the very end where you break the last sentence up into three different lines. It shows a shift in the narrator's mood and provides an interesting rhythm to finish the poem. I also liked the recurring theme of the "yellow sky." I found it interesting that you didn't say "gray sky", which would be an indicator of a melancholy tone and feeling. By satin yellow sky, you acknowledged that things aren't completely indictable, but that the narrator's situation is still slightly uncomfortable and a little different than what we'd think.
Now for the negatives...I have none. Sorry if I over-analyzed this poem. But I like to do that haha. My best advice would be to keep doing what you're doing. If u like, Hmu and I'll give ya some more reviews. Good job with this one.
-GL24
Points: 7867
Reviews: 159
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