Oh man. You should enter this in the Green Room Library Contest Thingy is it isn't too late!
This is amazing. It felt like you were describing my life exactly to me! I found one thing that isn't changing the meaning of the poem, but just makes it flow nicer if you would switch it.
I would change this:
My life, my life, I don't know
into this:
My life, my life, I [bold]do not[/bold] know
Other than that, this poem is perfect and flawless! Keep Writing!
Happy Review Day!
yubbies21
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