Hey Wonder!
I suppose dawn is drab, but then again, twilight is also drab! However, there is sunrise, just as there is sunset, and sunrise can be startling beautiful. Not to be too nitpicky...
Anyway, I like this poem! It's really cute and the images are neat. I like the fact that clouds seem to roam around in herds and the sun is proud and whatnot. Also: the world is totally out of sync. Just saying!
I do think it's an odd expression to say that the sun wants to shout it out loud... I understand where you're going at, but this line seemed a bit odder than the other ones.
Also, the way you talk about the sun reminds me of people. People take forever to develop, then they have a pretty egotistical stage, and then they show off the beauty that they always inherently had, but never displayed before. Or, at least that's the metaphor that I am taking out of it.
Anyway, cute poem! I liked it.
P.S. Not looking at the acrobats of birds? PFFT!
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