Hi, I hope you don't mind if I review your poem, which by the way was excellent There was beautiful imagery, and the line: "much like life itself" made the subject of the poem very clear. Good job ! There were a few spelling errors, but I won't mention them as they were small enough not to take any meaning from the poem. There were a couple lines that needed tweaking, but the only one that kind of stood out at me was: “ with a Herculean wave to submerged one's head." It just didn't fit. I see how it goes with the previous verse of how the sand tickles one's feet but you don't exactly need match them up. Maybe change it to something along the lines of: with a Herculean wave,
to submerge one's hopes and dreams.
Other than that it was a great poem, and most people would be jealous of your obvious talent if they read this. I hope to read more of your work!
Points: 82
Reviews: 53
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