Yousa English! Or at least spell colour with a u.
This was amazing, and despite the fact I can't make head nor tail of it, this is so nonsensical it is easy to relate to, almost like a dream.
I have a little recommendation for the last line, and that is make it rhyme. It sounds really nice when you end a poem with a rhyming couplet particularly.
Perhaps yyou could rhyme it with day, possibly as in the phrase night and day. Of the top of my head.
Hope this helps,
Take That You Fiend!
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