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Review Day Theme Song( Parody of Pokemon Theme Song)

by WindSailor


I realize that I didn't keep the original rhyme scheme the whole time, this was just for fun mostly. 

We want to be the very best

Team on YWS

Good reviews are the test
To help them is our cause

So we will travel across this forum
Looking for works to review
And we will determine what they need

To improve their writing

*

Chorus 

Review Day (Gotta review them all) is the greatest thing
that happens every last Sunday
Review day, oh, you're a writers friend
we wish you would never end

Review day (gotta review them all) brings the best out in us
a community of love
you review this and I'll review that
(Review Day) Gotta review them all\

*

Verse 2 

Every typo along the way
With laughter we will face
We will write throughout the night
To claim our rightful prize

My clock says it is getting late
It is time for us to get ahead
Don't let their massive point lead
Tempt you to go to bed

*

Chorus

Review Day (Gotta review them all) is the greatest thing
that happens every last Sunday
Review day, oh, you're a writers friend
we wish you would never end

Review day (gotta review them all) brings the best out in us
a community of love
you review this and I'll review that
(Review Day) Gotta review them all

Bridge 

(Gotta review them all)x5

Yeah!

Review day!

Is the greatest thing
That happens every last Sunday

Review day, oh, you're a writers friend
we wish you would never end

Review day (gotta review them all) brings the best out in us
a community of love
you review this and I'll review that

Review day! 


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Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Happy review day! Let's see what we have here...

Now when I review something, I have to sing it and man, this was awesome! I loved this song to death! One thing that bugged me(it wasn't you) is that the people that reviewed this, didn't even give you advice, they just posted the original, said they liked it and posted it as a review. Ughh! That's just rude! XD Some of the lines were a bit off. If you want to see where it was, just sing it softly to yourself, you'll see exactly where you tripped up a bit.

This was hilarious and went right along with the tune. This really did deserve to be first on the front of the page of YWS. *high fives Wind*. (How come I didn't think of this first? XD) You spelling is great, along with your grammar. One thing that I may advise is that you put a comma where is a slight pause because it helps the reader and singer to know where to stop for a second. (I remember at church today, the singer didn't have music but knew it by heart. She sang it way too fast though XD). Well, this is going to be my new song to sing in the shower! Singing activated! Go! If you are good at singing, then you should totally make a video on youtube of you singing this. (maybe even a music video to go with it XD) Great job, overall. Have a nice review day. Keep calm and keep writing!

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Hey, WindSailor! Happy review day from Team Plasma! (Or, more fittingly, release your Pokemon, you singy-songy trainer!)

As a kid I've always sang along to the theme when I watched the show, so I loved this so much. I'm not a superstar lyrical reviewer, so bear with me here.

Team on YWS

The syllable could is off, but that's because W is such a mouthful to say. Perhaps if it's Yewis or some other two/three syllable word to describe this wonderful site.

Good reviews are the test
To help them is our cause

Originally, the song started both these lines as "to". Since it's been replaced by the word good, it sounds a bit off. Perhaps the first line can he: "To write reviews are the test"?

So we will travel across this forum

I think it sounds better if the "so" is crossed out.

Looking for works to review

(and)

To improve their writing

These lines are a couple syllables too long compared to the lines in the original theme. Perhaps squish down a bit so it flows more.

Review Day (Gotta review them all) is the greatest thing

I think if you cross out the 'is' and add a comma, it flows more and sounds more natural or like the theme.

Review day, oh, you're a writers friend

Love it! Personally I'd stretch it out to an ohhh, but that may not be your style. Also, there should be an apostrophe in writer's.

we wish you would never end

Try: "we wish you'd never end" instead. Squish 'em syllables.

Review day (gotta review them all) brings the best out in us
a community of love
you review this and I'll review that
(Review Day) Gotta review them all\

My favorite stanza! There seems to be a random slash at the end, though. Also, try review 'em all instead, just like catch 'em all.

Don't let their massive point lead
Tempt you to go to bed

I also really love this!

Well, that's all the critique I have for you today. All in all, this very cute, and I'm totally going to sing the YWS version every time I hear the theme now.

Keep on writing!

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There's not much to review, this is BRILLIANT!!! It should be the official theme song!
Do you mind....?

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I wanna be the very best
Like no one ever was
To catch them is my real test
To train them is my cause

I will travel across the land
Searching far and wide
Each Pokemon to understand
The power that's inside

Pokemon gotta catch them all its you and me
I know it's my destiny
Pokemon, oh, you're my best friend
In a world we must defend
Pokemon, a heart so true
Our courage will pull us through

You teach me and I'll teach you
Pokemon, gotta catch 'em all

Every challenge along the way
With courage I will face
I will battle every day
To claim my rightful place

Come with me, the time is right
There's no better team
Arm in arm we'll win the fight
It's always been our dream




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Hello there, Zontafer here to review your work!

Rhyming and Words
I read your A/N and I know you did this for fun, but since I'm reviewing this I kind of have to comment on it.
At the start of the parody, the rhyiming was a bit off. I can see you've used 'cause' as in the original song, but because it's not the same lyrics, it doesn't really fit in.

Parody

We want to be the very best

Team on YWS

Good reviews are the test
To help them is our cause


Original
I wanna be the very best,
Like no one ever was.
To catch them all is my real test,
To train them is my cause.


I've pointed out the difference here, where you can see that 'was' makes 'cause' fit at the end there.
I'd also like to give you a suggestion, which can help it flow slightly better.

'We want to be the very best' > 'We wanna be the very best'

Lyric vs. Melody
The last thing I did was to follow your parody along with the melody/song to check if the flow was good. Firstly I thought the chorus didnt fit, but after listening to it a couple times I realized it actually did, so great job. ^^

The only thing I couldn't seem to fit in of the chorus was 'a community of love'. I don't know if it's just me, but it felt a bit... awkward to sing, if that's the right word. Might just be me. c'x

The other stuff sounds good to me, so 1+ for that. ;)

Favorite Parts
As this is a parody of the Pokémon Theme Song, I just had to write this.
The first favorite part must be the second verse. There's nothing I would change there, it just really goes great along with the song + it's catchy.

The other piece I liked the most would be the first half of the chorus. I don't have much to say, other than the fact that it was a fantastic part of the parody, and I enjoyed reading it.

I hope you'll make more of these parodys later, it was pleasant to review it.

Keep up the good work and may Team Aqua be the very best! ^_^

- Zontafer

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Knight r4 here to review this work. I saw it in the spotlight and decided to review it. I certainly hope this helps you! Go team Rocket! And sort of to Pokemon. But who cares about that? Oh and just as a disclaimer I don't know the Pokemon theme song so I don't know the rhyming...

Review day, oh, you're a writers friend
we wish you would never end
Hehehe! This is probably the best rhyme in the entire poem. It sounds sort of catchy too! :D.

Review day (gotta review them all) brings the best out in us
This is true to a certain extent, but there are also a lot of rivalries. ;) good line though! XD.

(Review Day) Gotta review them all\
I think I found a typo here. It's funny that you had a typo in the first line of the next verse. :P

Before I mention the things that I like about this I just though I should mention that you need to add a little bit more punctuation. XD. Almost all poems lack punctuation for some reason.

I really enjoyed the poem as a whole! I liked the flow of the poem. It didn't seem slow, or durgelike at at all! XP. (Just to let you know, that [durgelike] is not a real word. :D). I like the upbeat feeling in the poem. Of course that is kind of up to the reader when they do not know the tune. :). Great job of writing this poem. Parodies are awesome! Gives you five starts and a bag of skitessisss! (Sour skitlessess at that)! I have tons of extra. Do you like Mnm's? Is that how you spell it? Anyhoots...fantastical job of writing this poem (parody)! It was awesome!!! Happy writing!!! :D




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Just so you know, you spelled parody wrong.




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This is totally hilarious! It's also very creative. I had no idea someone can come up with something like this! It is super awesome! I have never really listened to the real pokemon theme song but here is how it goes,


I wanna be the very best,
Like no one ever was.
To catch them all is my real test,
To train them is my cause.

I will travel across the land,
Searching far and wide.
Teach Pokemon to understand
The power that's inside

Pokemon, (gotta catch them all) its you and me
I know its my destiny
Pokemon, oh, you're my best friend
In a world we must defend

Pokemon, (gotta catch them all) a heart so true
Our courage will pull us through
You teach me and I'll teach you
(Po-ke-mon) Gotta catch 'em all

Every challenge along the way
With courage I will face
I will battle every day
To claim my rightful place

Come with me, the time is right
There's no better team
Arm in arm we'll win the fight
It's always been our dream

Pokemon!

(Gotta catch 'em all)

It's you and me
I know it's my destiny

Pokemon!

Oh, you're my best friend,
In a world we must defend.

Pokemon!

A heart so true.
Our courage will pull us through.
You teach me and I'll teach you.

Pokemon!

(Gotta catch 'em all)x5

Yeah!

Pokemon!

It's you and me
I know it's my destiny

Pokemon!

Oh, you're my best friend,
In a world we must defend.

Pokemon!

A heart so true.
Our courage will pull us through.
You teach me and I'll teach you.

POKEMON!


I just copied and pasted it lol. But good job! You can really compare your song to the actual theme song and it is totally different. Your song rhymed and everything! It is flawless! Good job!





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