Young Writers Society

Hey there! Purple here to give you a review! Now, let's get started
This was such an alluring poem to read, just wow. I have to say my favorite part is the first stanza where you're giving the harsh reality of life that thing's don't turn out how you expect them to when you are younger. I would just fix the third line in the second stanza "for more was lacking than" because it doesn't fit with the other two lines before it at all. No big deal. You could possibly change it to simply "more was lacking than" or change it to "there was more lacking than". To continue with what I like, the representation with sand and showing how things are never permanent was just sublime. I hope you have a great rest of the day!
~Purple

Hey there katefrench!
I really liked this poem! Some of the imagery in it is very imaginative and suiting. My favourite bit was:

because life isn’t made of

fairy tales

and there isn’t always a

happy ending

or really an ending at all

Hi there, katefrench461! My name is Scarlett and I'll be reviewing your poem this afternoon. ^^

I really like this poem. It's kind of bittersweet yet still sort of cute but also sad. The flow was very good, with only a few hitchs in places, but that's okay. Nothing is ever perfect. I really like how each verse went, especially this whole of verse one;

ours is the story

that ruins the dreams

of little girls with wide eyes

and bigger imaginations

because life isn’t made of

fairy tales

and there isn’t always a

happy ending

or really an ending at all

I was never a princess

nor you a prince