Hello. I'm Peanut. Please review this for me;
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Please!
Summary; No summary. I can't find one! This is only the first page of a very long book that I am writing.
What I want you to look at for me, well, to be honest, there are many things . Tell me every mistake you can find, please, but also tell me if this is a good lead for my book. I want to make it the absolute best thing that I've ever written !
[spoiler]I know it is a little confusing, but the sorrow and the nightmare are both animals that I made up. I don't know how to explain a nightmare in my lead without making the story off-track and awkward. Watch out for suggestions for that too [/spoiler]
Thank you very much
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