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Mon Aug 11, 2008 12:32 am
Kylan says...



Greyhound

It needs some help.

Thanks,

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Fri Aug 15, 2008 11:32 pm
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Icaruss says...



Kylan's coming up. The rest are done.
there are many problems in our times
but none of them are mine





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Tue Aug 19, 2008 12:50 pm
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Twit says...



something kind of scavenger


It's short(ish) and for a contest, so it needs lots of harsh help, please. :)
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Wed Aug 20, 2008 12:25 am
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xxfourthelement says...



I have a story that desperately needs to be torn to shreds...

Golden

Spiritual fantasy, in case it matters...
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Mon Sep 01, 2008 10:50 pm
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Icaruss says...



TL G-Wooster's done. Sorry this is taking so long. I'm lazy.
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Mon Sep 01, 2008 11:33 pm
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Sportgurl46 says...



hey :) this is a poem and i hope that's ok :) this poem needs to be FINISHED and i really need a good critiquer for me to finally say that :)

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it's called "Beaten by Love"

thank you so much :)
omg lol thx HD!





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Sat Sep 20, 2008 11:58 pm
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Kylan says...



I wrote a stream of consciousness piece the other day and thought you might be interested.

Here's a link: That's OK.

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Mon Nov 24, 2008 11:53 pm
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Jiggity says...



Icaruss selling his soul, so cheaply? I'm so disillusioned, man.

XD

I wrote something the other day. I was half-delirious at the time, honestly, it was 2am but I wasn't going to leave *another* short story unfinished so I rushed to end it and thus sleep. It's a sad day when I have to actually proposition people for critiques, haha, but its happening more and more often.

Anywhoodles,

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Tell me whatcha think.
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