Haiku Train

BarrettBenedict · 2009-04-26T07:14:14Z

This is pretty simple and can be lots of fun. The premise is you take the last line of the haiku before yours and make it the first as yours. It doesn't necessarily have to be the exact line either. If you can cleverly change it in subtle ways so that it rhymes or sounds the same that is also cool. Example: This is a haiku five, seven, five syllables would be the format ... could be a doormat were it not for the large head must be tiger's skin etc. So here's a starter haiku: old film reels rotate monochrome images of what dogs imagine

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Sun Sep 15, 2024 1:11 am

Iggy says... · Sun Sep 15, 2024 1:11 am

meet me at midnight,
he whispered into my ear,
his breath hot as sin

“I can't go back to yesterday because I was a different person then."
- Lewis Carroll

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Sun Sep 15, 2024 2:30 am

herb says... · Sun Sep 15, 2024 2:30 am

his breath hot as sin,
curing every scar on my
body, soul, & heart

[soon, i will submit myself to the stars]

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Sun Sep 15, 2024 5:32 am

JazzicusMaximus says... · Sun Sep 15, 2024 5:32 am

Body, Soul, & Heart
The essentials to live life
Can't live with one gone

I am the Timekeeper, Quote Hunter, Letter Stealer, and Grave Visitor
"Don't tell me the sky's the limit when there are footprints on the moon." — Paul Brandt
Genesis 3:19

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Sun Sep 15, 2024 11:39 am

DeadMenTe11N0Tales says... · Sun Sep 15, 2024 11:39 am

Can't live with one gone,
Can't take it anymore without you;
The end is ever near.

(You can call me Grim if you want)

Remember, until we meet again,

“Never trust anyone who has not brought a book with them.”― Lemony Snicket

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Sun Sep 15, 2024 1:16 pm

herb says... · Sun Sep 15, 2024 1:16 pm

the end is ever near;
and i yearn for another time.
a moment with you.

[soon, i will submit myself to the stars]

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Sun Sep 15, 2024 3:33 pm

candyhearts says... · Sun Sep 15, 2024 3:33 pm

a moment with you,
entwined; time bends with your touch.
hands brush, then retreat.

I want to review your poetry!!
Payton, she/her <3

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Sun Sep 15, 2024 4:16 pm

Starve says... · Sun Sep 15, 2024 4:16 pm

Hands brush, and then retreat
the cat is a pristine bun;
a bundle of grace.

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Sun Sep 15, 2024 6:13 pm

deleted48 says... · Sun Sep 15, 2024 6:13 pm

a bundle of grace,
your hand fits mine like it knows
what it means to stay.

In a shadow there is the blessing of a shadow.
— Kuki Shūzō

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Sun Sep 15, 2024 6:15 pm

herb says... · Sun Sep 15, 2024 6:15 pm

what it means to stay
with you every waking hour,
well, it feels like pain.

[soon, i will submit myself to the stars]

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Mon Sep 16, 2024 12:09 am

romanticchemist says... · Mon Sep 16, 2024 12:09 am

well, it feels like pain.
running from fire just to
land in one more flame.

like the stars chase the sun

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Mon Sep 16, 2024 11:47 am

DeadMenTe11N0Tales says... · Mon Sep 16, 2024 11:47 am

Land in one more flame,
just one more dive into pain;
To fix all the wrongs.

(You can call me Grim if you want)

Remember, until we meet again,

“Never trust anyone who has not brought a book with them.”― Lemony Snicket

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Mon Sep 16, 2024 2:46 pm

Starve says... · Mon Sep 16, 2024 2:46 pm

To fix all the wrongs,
the rights, and the lefts; we must
commit grammar fraud.

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Tue Sep 17, 2024 2:06 pm

DeadMenTe11N0Tales says... · Tue Sep 17, 2024 2:06 pm

Commit grammar fraud,
It's the best thing you could do;
Or tax evasion.

(You can call me Grim if you want)

Remember, until we meet again,

“Never trust anyone who has not brought a book with them.”― Lemony Snicket

This is DeadMenTe11N0Tales, signing off

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Wed Sep 18, 2024 2:22 am

Iggy says... · Wed Sep 18, 2024 2:22 am

you evade me, like
smoke slipping through my fingers;
i wish you would stay.

“I can't go back to yesterday because I was a different person then."
- Lewis Carroll

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