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Sat Apr 17, 2021 1:09 am
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17. Very Lame Filler Poem Because Whatcha Has Forgotten How To Poet But Is Still Determined To Write Her nApO Poem Regardless


i keep ending up with stupid cliches
forced enjambment that does
n't fit, similes with no depth,
with sentence structure that is
repetitive enough to be noticeable yet
inconsistent enough to be gross -
rhymes that are as sticky as floss
between plaque-ridden teeth and
emotions that are too blurry
to be compelling. and where do you?
put the punctuation: what will be stark!
enough to look clea nupo n the page or
l,a,c,e,y. enough to add frills to this gross
(repetition of gross used to emphasize
how utterly gross I find this poem;
gross. gross. it is gross. gross like too-short nails
that reveal puffy pink nail beds. gross. gross!)
poem?! and i can'T even decidE on How
to caPitaliZE aND slOWLy EVErYTHiNG
BUILdS INTO An UPPERCASE SCREAM -
HAVE YOU GLEAMED
ENOUGH FROM THE BROKEN SEAMS
OF THIS NOT-SO-ICE-CREAM
OF THE CROP SCHEME
TO DEEM (blah to even out line size)
it trash. (more blah blah blah aaaah)
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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18. losing Polly Pockets and all the remaining bits of comfort

you slip into your dad's baggy winter coat,
hoping you will find solace in the oversized
hug and the heaviness of the sleeves.
younger you used to bury her nose
in the scratchy material, sawdust
licking her cheeks, and lose herself
in the sharp smell of broken grass bits
and the tang of gasoline that seeps
between blades of a whipper snipper.
you try to inhale deeply like she used to,
but there is no comfort to be found in it.
perhaps it is because the ultimate pinnacle
of tragedy used to be losing the left
stiletto heel of your favourite Polly Pocket -
and you would've never fathomed
anything could be worse than having your
whole entire Polly Pocket stolen from you.
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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Sun Apr 18, 2021 5:42 pm
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19. shedding stones

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When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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Mon Apr 19, 2021 1:04 am
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Spoiler! :
Hi whatchamacallit,

OH MY GOD I love "18. losing Polly Pockets and all the remaining bits of comfort" so much (sorry for yelling lol). The descriptions and voice is soooo amazing. I love the way you opened the poem and described the coat comparing the heaviness to a hug. I think you really captures nostalgia feeling well.

Good luck wtih with the rest of NaPo! You got this!
  





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@Charm AWWWW THANK YOU! actually I kid you not, I was kinda lacking inspiration and thought it might help to mimic someone else's style and was attempting to mimic your style in that one xD <3
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

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POEM 19?? Big fan of that!! I love the multiple directions it can be read & I think these sorts of poems are so fun to read & write, and the map motif is so perfect weaving through here.

And the description of the tragedy of losing Polly Pocket shoes definitely awakened some deep nostalgia in me too xD (also agree with charm, that opening coat metaphor/image is cozy and beautiful)

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you should know i am a time traveler &
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but i have promised to return
  





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@whatchamacallit omg hahah that's so funny!
  





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@alliyah Thank you!! <3 8-year-old whatcha may have had a literal breakdown over the lost shoe but you didn't hear it from me >.>
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

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20. in many ways, meaningless TVs and Sparrows

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Spoiler! :
inspired by a quote from a random quote generator (the quote is the first line in quotation marks), so uh, that's why it makes zero sense whatsoever xD
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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21. Finders, keepers; losers, weepers.


I'm scared of losing things. My whole world revolves around that fear, a hula hoop that barely manages to stay in my sway, woozy with the knowledge that anything has the potential to disappear. Every time the plastic ring swings away, leaving empty air to wrap its iron grasp around my hips, I can feel my brain blip and curl up in itself, neurons crossed that the neon tube will hit bone again and I'll know this is "not quite lost".

Everything that is found might imminently fall out of my orbit and crash against the ground. Everything I have found is rolled up in the hollow core of that hula hoop, a map superposed between two states: torn or whole and folded into infinite origami loops. And I know, even if I find it whole and I unfold it, even if I follow the grid to each x-marked destination, I might find nothing there but me, and the only placation is breathing lonely air into my lungs - filling me with splinters that I cough up and pierce my tongue. I will welcome oxygen starvation.

I'm an endless game of juggling things around my waist, hoping this hopeless act of acting as gravity won't go to waste, every rotation of my core another chance to hold my breath and wait, telling myself I have lost nothing - yet. Though it is only a matter of time before I forget I am a self-imposed planet, and I lose my rings and I am lost in the wreckage of losing things.
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

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Tue Apr 20, 2021 7:46 pm
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goodness this last poem with the recording was just :,,,((((( i adored the internal rhyme and your ability to deliver it so well is just the icing on the cake. can't wait to read the rest of your napo <3
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@veeren awww thank you :'))))))) that's so sweet <3
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

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22. a unicorn emerges calmly from the chaos

the unicorn with
the purple felt coat folds her
hooves beneath her chest,
stirring the silver water
and sinking into bubbles.



Spoiler! :
tanka!!

full credit for the inspiration of this one goes to @queenshadowgem <3333

and the "chaos" part of the title refers to everything about this pad -> https://writerfeedpad.com/yZGhckf7x3 xD
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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23. learning to swallow seeds

a tattoo on my tongue that clings tenaciously to tastebuds; i thought promises were truer. the tang of other words might disintegrate in my mouth after a few moments, leaving only a trace of sticky residue on my fingers that is rinsed away the next time i stick my hands under the tap. but promises, those are different. they may slip off my tongue and bury themselves like a ship hull-up between my cheek and gums, but still they remain timelessly, a treasure resistant to the waves, something that cannot be tugged away in a tide of mouthwash.

but i am starting to realize that a promise, overturned and anchored in the corals of molars, slowly loses its lumber. golden paint flakes away like shiny braces being peeled from teeth, except braces leave teeth resolutely perfect while shedded paint leaves a ship nameless and aimless. and then as the frame drains away, and all that is left are bits of driftwood, the promise is unstuck from its perch between gums and cheek and i swallow it like the harmless seeds of a clementine, picking out the few bits of leftover pith with floss.

a promise is a thing that is forgotten but never fully lost. somewhere in the pit of your digestive tract, the splinters of a mast float through acid and the fibres of rigging ropes wind around bubbles.
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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24. the truth about explosions

with a bright yellow chick
cupped in my palms,
my doubts all agreed it was a jailbreak.
like a scoop of stardust,
how chaotic and distracted
We met at the end of the ladder, and i
was easily unscrewed.
i can't imagine how dandelion down
can become the night air.
autumn leaves, already waiting,
gave to us a crushing hug and black rain.
Apparently, we had whispered backing.
i saw the loop of brown red and orange
float into view past the edge of the roof
and though i know even suns have timers
I peeked over the roof to see
a window waving up at me.
i refuse to believe
I closed my eyes and stepped.
"Don't fall".
I don't remember this fluffy little thing
shattering my load - There seems to be no steel edge.
I will one day burst into a supernova.



Spoiler! :
So this was intended to be a contrapuntal poem (inspired by @Liminality <3) buuuut that didn't really work out so now it's more of a "mush these two poems together without any system or logic" hehe c: The two poems I used were i refuse to believe in chickens and I had my doubts about the edge and I don't hate the finished product? I mean it doesn't make a bunch of sense but some of the resulting imagery is really cool and I wouldn't have come up with it otherwise ^^
When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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the only theft here is of decency when carina decided to rob me of my pride and put me on a banana
— veeren