I love the idea of closing the poem with it's title / reveal. The Romeo / Rose poem especially I found interesting to read through the end. Nice painting too!
you should know i am a time traveler & there is no season as achingly temporary as now
@alliyah - Thank you! I was inspired by a poetry novel I read before NaPo started to get some inspo on writing a poetry novel, if that makes sense ^^ I'm glad you like the romeo/rose poem, it's also one of my favourites until now XD Thank you for stopping by!
Shall i look at thee from another eye? thou art so honest and thy heart so true it shaketh me hard to say goodbye i only look to thee, though i feel blue thou stands taller than dimm’d greens sadly my feet can only reach so high the trail of thy kisses are thirteens and wicked eyes do watch as thy walks by how i wish, dear love, that thou wast mine, we can dance through the night till our feet art sore as i wait just to see thy face by the bus line then close my heart to dream of thee once more but what know i of sonnets or old rhyme? i ain’t no Shakespeare – but i still write in time
twelve - all the times i called you one - the only time i thought about myself two - the second time i kissed the ground three - three times in a row, i failed four - fourthousand fourhundred and four seconds where i lived five - five times you spelled my name wrong six - six is my unlucky number, and you forgot seven - wishing on sevens and elevens to see you again eight - eight was never there for me, it was always nine nine - nine, where are you now? ten - ten times trying to tear in two eleven - elevens like sevens, you ran out to quickly twelve - all the times i ignored myself, for you
i’m the light of your life, you say, but why do you reach for the lighter, so quick, i’m not even out of reach yet? you see, that’s where you’re wrong, baby
family tree Michelle + Larkin = (Harper) (Skyla) + Robert = (Theo) & Luna (Harper) + (Theo) = Scarlett - - - - -
Larkin + (Skyla)
Once there were two lovers, he was the laidback popular guy who everyone adored, she was the shy daughter of their high school principal, it was just meant to be but then a terrible incident, led to divorce and then the only thing they wished for was; “if only we had spoken up”
Michelle + Larkin
he married the woman who served him alcohol to drown his sorrows, to forget her.
(Skyla) + Robert
she married the man who tried to be there for her, while she was only thinking of him.
Michelle + Larkin = (Harper)
he was blessed with a daughter who had his nature and looked everything like him, this reminded him of everything he was to her, he decided to give his daughter the name they were going to give their daughter, if they would ever be blessed with one
(Skyla) + Robert = (Theo) & Luna
she was blessed with a son who had her nature and looked nothing like him, this reminded her of everything he was to her, she decided to give her son the name they were going to give their son, if they would ever be blessed with one, little did she know, she would not live long enough to see him live up to his name.
(Harper) + (Theo)
Once more there were two lovers, she was the fierce popular girl, he was the shy guy and read books under trees, it was just meant to be but then a terrible incident, led to their end. and then the only thing they wished for was; “if only we had stayed silent”
(Harper) + (Theo) = Scarlett
Once again there was a girl, daughter of a fierce girl and a shy guy, granddaughter of a popular guy and a shy girl, she wanted nothing to do with her history of unfortunate lovers.
Scarlett
and thus she is incomplete, and so is her story...
why can’t you write nice things? you always go on and on about tragedies and how life gets in the way of what you really desire and wish to do, why can’t you just rhyme and dream?
i know Luna hates going to your place, i know she’s never going to forgive you, even if that’s what she wants deep in her heart
but i need to know, i need to know if you really stopped loving her, 1) her as in my mother 2) her as in Harper 3) her as in your daughter
i need to know, if she stopped loving you in that last minute, the minute where you became the monster she had to run from
i need to know, if you hate me if you hate her if you hate my father
i need to know if you’re sorry for being the reason that you had to outlive your daughter if you’re wishing you can turn back time 1) to do it all over again 2) to do it differently
if you ever stopped thinking about your first love? (not my mother’s mother, but the one you wished was her mother)
- a letter for Larkin, my mother’s father
PS: i can’t call you grandpa just yet, i need to know first.
Woah love the experiments with the visual poems! I really enjoy making poems + videos on canva, so loved seeing your work with that, and the progressive counting / clock made that poem feel more filled with anticipation to me as the details circled around, perfect poem to be represented with a visual element like that.
Your poem "in the blood" was also SUPER creative! What a great blend of story / character / poetry! Keep this awesome creativity going, I love it!
only because i’m tired doesn’t mean that i gave up
^^ I feel that one!! Simple but, YES!
you should know i am a time traveler & there is no season as achingly temporary as now
Surround yourself with people who are serious about being writers, and who will tell you, ‘Hey—you can do better than this.’ Who will be critical of your work, but also supportive. And who will not be competitive in a negative way. — Isabel Quintero