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melancholia induced by my lack of self



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Mon Apr 29, 2024 12:18 am
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CapybarasAndCoffee says...



herbalhour wrote:28.xi i think that i am a house and they are a skyscraper.
with lines borrowed from @22Midnight, @avianwings47, @Coffeewriter, @CapybarasAndCoffee, @momonster, @Fleur, @GengarIsBestBoy, @soundofmind, @starbean, @Plume, @Horisun, @Que in underline. i have changed some punctuation.
i think that somehow i am somewhat inferior to you even though we are the same
(as one rises from the ground to reclaim the magic that was once lost
the other sinks into the sea to lose what it once called its own.)
& you know that i am nothing when you look at me & you know that my hands are not meant to be held.
it's pitiful to exist and sure, i look perfect on the surface but i’m a nightmare underneath
(i stand here alone all on my own, and i ask why you left me
and yes, i heal the broken parts of my soul by gently putting myself back together but it's not working so well.)
time is ticking slow, yet too fast & i didn't realize there were only remains of our hearts
(i am in my fear of familiar comforts becoming worn out by wear & tear.)
your secrets are now mine to tell but ‘cause of love i keep them safe
(you told me that it was okay, that it didn't have to be perfect but i swear you told me that you would leave me if i wasn't.)
à la fin, j'aimerais que j'eusse dit «je suis désolée je t'aime et pour le reste de ma vie, c'est toi.»*
(but i hadn't, even though we observe the soft surface of the thunder-gray lake.)
so now i'm pleading that you let me out of my own skin, i don’t recognize this life anymore

*At the end, I wish I had said "I'm sorry I love you and for the rest of my life, it's you."


Honestly if someone sang this as a song I'd listen to it over and over and over again
It's so beautiful
ENTJ ~ Witty ~ Christian ~ Funny ~ Honest ~ Teen ~ Author ~ Baby Boomer In A Gen Z's Body
  





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Mon Apr 29, 2024 7:50 am
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Coffeewriter says...



Wow @CapybarasAndCoffee! This is awesome and I love how you constructed everything!!
“And just like the moon, we must go though phases of emptiness to feel full again.”
  





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Mon Apr 29, 2024 10:28 am
herbalhour says...



Spoiler! :
@Coffewriter , @CapybarasAndCoffee, thankd ypu two, it means a lot!
nothing is forever but everything was infinite

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Spoiler! :
obsessed with your cyclical haiku! I love all this thread, but that one's my favourite so far
  





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Spoiler! :
thanks @IcyFlame!
nothing is forever but everything was infinite

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herbalhour says...



29. hi, ku
words are kinda odd
who is ku and why greet them?
huh, odd syllables.
nothing is forever but everything was infinite

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30. melancholia induced by my lack of self
mirrors were broken yet i found none of me
(i think my reflection lied)
i want to be someone but i am many and nobody
maybe you are the one behind my mirror
but it's impossible to tell.
(there is not a soul behind these eyes,
only a tainted heart & a broken mind.)

if there are answers to this problem will you be merciful to me & my pitiful exsistence?
(i think that you have condescending views of me.)

hearts were loving until i spoke up
(you broke my sense of self.)
minds were knowing until i had woken up
(you made my lack of self.)

i think this is the solace made by the melancholia induced by my lack of self.
nothing is forever but everything was infinite

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Tue Apr 30, 2024 7:06 pm
WeepingWisteria says...



Spoiler! :
Hey, herb!! Great poetry this year ^^I love to see your last poem echo your thread title, bringing your theme full circle. I especially like the lines (there is not a soul behind these eyes/only a tainted heart & a broken mind.)
She/They/Fae

“the wist i knew would never allow a straight boy in their stories” ~Omni
“Hi Omni can I request wist get the role mom friend :]" ~winter
“ah yes, fear Wist's smile :) <- speaks of layers and layers of secrets” ~mint
  





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30.xii finale
0:6/7
(1:1, so 1.5:8)
2:9
(2.5:6)
2.75:4
(2:i,19/20)
2.☆:12 , 3:3
(3.ii:5/6/7)
4:16 but 4.iii:11
(4.?!:17/18, so 5:4)
6:1/2?
(6.@:9)
7:3 it's 8:14
(8.vi:11)
9:1
(9.v:2?)
9.vi:3 9.?!?:9
(9.vii:13)
10:8/(9)
10.viii:15
(10.ix:9/10)
10.◇:2 so 10.!!!:5/(6)
11:14.
(12:7, 13:13)
13.25:5/6
(14:8)
15:1; 15.5:5/6/7
(16:10, 17:2)
17.5:1 and 18:2
(& 18.25:4 and yes, 18.5:5)
18.75:1
(19:2 20:4/5)
21:1, so/2?
though 22:1, 22.x:1
(22.10151103:1, 23:13)
24:3 25:6 as it washed away my sins.
(26:1 26.5:2)
27:1 so now 28:1.
(28.xi)
29:1
(30:8?)
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herbalhour says...



Spoiler! :
@Spearmint @Ventomology secret poem >.>
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