@Traves - done! My sincere apologies for the delay, I hope the review can still be useful.
@Aranya - I'm afraid I'm going to decline to review your poem. I just don't think I could be very helpful to you, as I don't really like slam poetry and have never tried writing it. I'm also not that comfortable with the topic of the poem and would have difficulty reviewing it impartially. Sorry I couldn't be of more help, and feel free to request a review on a different piece, or ask someone else here in the Will Review for Food forum to review your poem.
We're all stories in the end.
I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff. -EternalRain
I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS. -bluewaterlily
Thanks for that helpful review @Mea , because of it I wrote another draft which was so drastically changed that I published it separately instead of editing the original post. No more tears (Draft 3.0) I'd again like your criticism on it, and my questions remain the same. If you need something reviewed I'm more than willing.
Hello! I'm looking for some more feedback on my essay discussing the dark side of beauty and how American enculturation impacts Americans' view of it.
Thanks for your time!
"All that is gold does not glitter, Not all those who wander are lost; The old that is strong does not wither, Deep roots are not reached by the frost."
Link to Piece: The Origin: Prologue Type of Piece (Whether it's a novel, poetry, etc): It's a novel Age rating: 12+ Any other comments (Optional):Would be a great help! Thank you so much!
@Saichi - I went to go review your piece, but it says it's currently saved as a draft. You'll need to publish it before I can see it to review it. If you need extra points to re-publish it just let me know and I'll help you out. (It shouldn't cost points if you've already published it once, but there's a weird bug that won't let you re-publish it without having 200 points, though it doesn't take those points when you do). Alternatively, I'd be happy to review a different piece of yours!
Sorry it took me so long to respond to this request - just let me know when you've published it and I'll have a review for you within the day.
We're all stories in the end.
I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff. -EternalRain
I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS. -bluewaterlily
@Corryn - I would be happy to! However, right now I can't see the work, as you seem to have set it to private. Can you please double check your settings and make sure you didn't accidentally unpublish it or hide the folder it's in?
We're all stories in the end.
I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff. -EternalRain
I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS. -bluewaterlily
Mea wrote:@Corryn - I would be happy to! However, right now I can't see the work, as you seem to have set it to private. Can you please double check your settings and make sure you didn't accidentally unpublish it or hide the folder it's in?
@Corryn - I'm sorry, I checked the work after you posted and was able to see it, but I'm only now getting a chance to sit down and review it and now it appears to be unpublished again. If you still want it reviewed, just republish it and I promise I 'll have it reviewed by the end of the weekend. I definitely didn't forget, I'm just pretty busy.
We're all stories in the end.
I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff. -EternalRain
I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS. -bluewaterlily
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