Cage

The walls are of flesh-
The bars are of bone.
Iron is the crown-
Shackled is the throne.

The king cries aloud,
Thunder in the halls.
He is answered by none
But the echoes of the walls.

The palace is of stone,
The cage is of gold.
The king sits, silent-
The crown is so cold.


The grim walls are thick,
The tower is so high,
A finger of Marble-
Scratching the sky.

The king looks below,
watching his kingdom.
His crown is so heavy,
He thinks about freedom.

He sighs and turn away,
Freedom left behind.
He could never break-
The shackles of his mind.

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Hey, shiney1 here

I love this poem. I love it. The imagery is astounding, and I could paint a picture in my head of all that went on. The poem flowed well, and I did not feel that the rhymes were stressed at all.
This is unique, for I have never read a poem like this one.

The walls are of flesh-
The bars are of bone.
Iron is the crown-
Shackled is the throne. That is a wonderful attention-grabber

The king cries aloud,
Thunder in the halls.
He is answered by none
But the echoes of the walls. This sets the mood well, and gave me a hint of the poem's subject

The palace is of stone,
The cage is of gold.
The king sits, silent-
The crown is so cold.

The grim walls are thick,
The tower is so high,
A finger of Marble-
Scratching the sky. This one is my favorite. Great way to describe the building

The king looks below,
watching his kingdom.
His crown is so heavy,
He thinks about freedom.

He sighs and turn away,
Freedom left behind.
He could never break-
The shackles of his mind.Great finish

You have talent. This is nice.
Keep writing!

very nice poem.. it could mean so many things to so many people.. as for me. i see it as if each of us could be the king in the poem the difference lies on what freedom we've been yearning for...

This poem. is.epic!! First off, you have amazing imagery, and the rhyming pattern really compliments the poem!! I couldn't find any mistakes, but that's because I'm not really a nitpicker. Anyway good job!!!

This poem is simply amazing, i personally think it is perfect so no criticism here

Hey
I don't know how to review poetry. At all.

He sighs and turns away,
Freedom left behind.
He could never break-
The shackles of his mind.

Otherwise it was amazing! I loved it!! As someone already mentioned, the imagery was awesome. It was just perfect to me, no criticism at all.

Hm, I wish I had a good review. But I don't. I noticed absolutely no mistakes (except the one pointed out by priceless.) It was a beautiful poem, so simple and yet wonderful. Like Shiney1 said, I could see it all as I was reading. The first stanza was amazing. Oh, I just reread it, why is watching not capitalized? Well, that's all I have to say. Great poem, I loved it!

wow this was fantastic! i really loved the feeling of the cage, shackles of his mind. good rhyme scheme, good imagery! it was kind of redundant, but it was very well written! i liked how you described the walls as flesh and bone, i could really picture that! i liked how you described the throne and the crown...i just liked the poem haha! good job and keep up the great writiing!!!!

This was the best poem I've ever read. Sorry I couldn't say more, but I have zero critique. I repeat: best poem ever.

Very interesting. Seems to be about the norms of power... how nobody has ever really succeeded in breaking them; to be something bigger. Like he wants to be a better king, but to be king, he has to be controlling and powerful. At least, that's what I got from it.

Astounding imagery, I can really picture the scene. What I read out of this is a King who feels that he is trapped by his responsibility to his people. I see no problem with this poem, none at all. I really enjoyed reading it as it really created a story. I wouldn't question it being in Narrative Poetry as I feel it does tell a bit of a story; unfinished story: maybe, but still a good story.

Hello! To get started, I just want to put a general statement out there by saying this is fantastic! I enjoyed reading it, and I even started to think of images that corresponded with what was being said. You started off strong, and came out with a strong finish. Quite honestly, I can't find any mistakes in here either! Keep writing, this poem was great!

I loved this poem! The imagery was as powerful as one could hope and the story of the shackled kind was moving. I could almost see the cage of bones, the shackled throne, the kind weighted down and alone, needless to say I enjoyed reading this. I really don't have any criticism to speak of, only applause for this truly inspired piece of writing

Good poem. It seemed a bit simple, but yet it had a deep meaning; if you get my drift. Also, your capitalization was abysmal. Every first letter in each line was capitalized, NO-NO. Follow the punctuation, if there is a comma at the end of the last line don't capitalize the first letter. If there is a period, feel free to do so. But otherwise, it was a good poem. I would give it 8 out of 10 stars. Keep Writing!

Okay, wow, just wow. I typically read through peoples works, mostly poems and such, and think of a powerful word to describe their piece. This poem particularly backed my mind up full of words, seriously the little people are all freaking out do to overload. Anyway, this is truly amazing.

The grim walls are thick,
The tower is so high,
A finger of Marble-
Scratching the sky.

I love the entire stanza but especially the last two lines, it brought chills to my spine.

He sighs and turn away,

I don't know if someone already commented on this but I believe it should be, He sighs and turns away" thats just me.

And on a final note, the last line, brilliant, pure brilliance, and don't let anyone tell you otherwise.
Keep writing,
SnowBerry