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lolz so thizs is really fcool doik? I writeed it for a constz and I wonz, so !! it rozx.

the only g1thing whicih lilly wanted was to be pretty but because shse wears glassed nobody asw her big bloue eyes or her UBER gorgus smile all they saw were her stupid pointy glasses befczu thys were dum and snobbie and scheerleaders ane they all thout they wus & all that. an dso lilley wasfellling rel!!l y said and she. cryd ‘why sddDesnobody. luv me, and she nevr had any friends they guy she had falnn in luv with so di67dn’t even liak her and she said she weould rather die so she was about the kinll herself; and an anagel came and he Said tha angel & gently spoke and told lillie that w ithout her Evrythign – the whole world would – die coz LIllie wwas specila. She wzas t he CHOSEN ONE. Just bek0cause eshhad glasses noboay looked past her but when she realized shge was ilike, and she OMG. she cryed she wuz so happy becaue now zhe ouckd final be poular.. and sol lille told this guy and they fell inz luc and lilly saved the world from thiz evil dude who was, going to taske; and kill reryone and stuff so she was a heron in eand eeveyron eloved her happily eva adftre. The EDN8.

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The formatting is a little off. And I'd like to point out this new feature on the YWS called a "Spellchecker". I think it might become your best friend if you used it a few times.

Other than that, fantastic! I can't wait to see more of your work!
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You captured me at She wzas t he CHOSEN ONE.

Ditto on what Dusky said.
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*laughs* Uh...I think uh, that this was just a joke right?

and she OMG. she cryed she wuz so happy becaue now zhe ouckd final be poular.. and sol lille told this guy and they fell inz luc


hahahahhahaa. "And she OMG! she cryed" that is so funnny....lol. And totally horrible but oh well, it made me laugh. Anyway bubblewrapped aren't you the fantastic poet? I think I recognize your screen name..

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Are you SERIOUS??

Sorry, let me right that so that you can understand...

Ar ez usa1 sperti6us??
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You're missing the whole point of 1337.




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1337 ?
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Don't think about it too hard...

I can safely say that this is one of the most incoherent stories ever. In fact, I can't make any sense of it at all. IN FACT, smaur's story sounds almost sane compared to this one.

This is going to be hard to beat...
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LOL! this 'uber' funny :wink:

Duskglimmer wrote:The formatting is a little off. And I'd like to point out this new feature on the YWS called a "Spellchecker". I think it might become your best friend if you used it a few times.

Other than that, fantastic! I can't wait to see more of your work!


How is bubblewarped sopposed to spellcheck her story? It's a little...er, past that?

EDIT: Oooh that was joke wasn't it...? :P
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thatsl zo COAL you fuz are awedm. Thax! :D

EDIT: LMZao you callex me BUBBLEWARPED...I tnkz it fiz ;)
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1337 \/\/r1771/\/ has no place in writting ahah but its good for 1337 i guess
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hehe, warped, time warp, rocky horror.. back to your story!

Amazing, really. I've never read such pieces that cause me to have such violent emotional reactions. I congratulate you on this achievment. , and forgive my spelling in light of you superior writing skills. Just work on the formatting, and it's good to go!
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Why... all of a sudden are these stories all.... not... good?
Did I miss a memo or something?




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Bubbles ... I can honestly say I didn't understand a word of that. CONGRADULATIONS! It's an amazing feat, not to be understood in the slightest so I think I shall award you with this here certificate! *hands over piece of paper with I O U on it* *shakes hand*
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:oops: :oops: :oops: lizk thazxn! :lol: :lol: 8)
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