THE BESTEST STORY EVVAR!!!!!!

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Do you love my story forever and ever and ever????

YEAH DUH!!
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NO B/C I SUK!!
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smaur
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 6:59 am
smaur says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 6:59 am
so im like REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY proud of this story and my mom said it was beatiful. so like obviously it's really really really really beatiful. plz say nice thingz abt it or I WILL TOTTALLY CRY!!



~*~*~*~* THE BESTEST STORY EVVAR!!!!!! ~*~*~*~*


So liek 1nce upon a time there was this guy and he was eating pie and then HE WAS ATTACKKED BY THIS ANGRY MONSTER OF DOOM!!!!!!!!!!

"Shoot,whattamI gonna do?"said the guy. i can't actually remember his name

"um shutup b/c I'm EATING YOU" said the monster and then HE ATE HIM OH NO!!!!!

and so like the guy is slidding down the monsters throat and then he gives the monster indiggestion LOLOL. so then he comes out and he's like, "TAKE THAT!!!!!"

And the monster's like, "NO!!!"

And then the guy's like, "YES!!!"

And the monster's like, "NO!!!"

and then they got run over by this truck.


umm, plz dont be mean cuz I dont like it when ppl are mean to me. i cry and stuff. Sometimes I write angsty poettry.





*courtesy of SPEW.
"He yanked himself free and fled to the kitchen where something huddled against the flooded windowpanes. It sighed and wept and tapped continually, and suddenly he was outside, staring in, the rain beating, the wind chilling him, and all the candle darkness inside lost."




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Snoink
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 7:05 am
Snoink says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 7:05 am
The story induces a very powerful emotion. It makes me want to scream and cry and rip my eyeballs out.

Good luck...
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smaur
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 7:06 am
smaur says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 7:06 am
OMG!!!! Thats totttally what my teacher said!!! Maybe you 2 are liek related!!!!
"He yanked himself free and fled to the kitchen where something huddled against the flooded windowpanes. It sighed and wept and tapped continually, and suddenly he was outside, staring in, the rain beating, the wind chilling him, and all the candle darkness inside lost."




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Griffinkeeper
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 7:20 am
Griffinkeeper says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 7:20 am
Where's my gun?

*Looks around*
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smaur
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 7:23 am
smaur says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 7:23 am
OMG!!!! thats liek the sweettest thing anyonez evar said about my story!!!!

wanna be best friends forever??
"He yanked himself free and fled to the kitchen where something huddled against the flooded windowpanes. It sighed and wept and tapped continually, and suddenly he was outside, staring in, the rain beating, the wind chilling him, and all the candle darkness inside lost."




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Niamh
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 9:09 am
Niamh says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 9:09 am
A brilliant work of tragedy. I don't think I can compare anything to this story's greatness.
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bubblewrapped
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 10:21 am
bubblewrapped says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 10:21 am
I have to agree with all of the above (particularly the part about the gun :wink:). It was so beautiful...it made me cry! :cry:
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smaur
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 11:17 am
smaur says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 11:17 am
Yay!!! You love me!!! Huggs and bunnies adn kisses!!!!!
"He yanked himself free and fled to the kitchen where something huddled against the flooded windowpanes. It sighed and wept and tapped continually, and suddenly he was outside, staring in, the rain beating, the wind chilling him, and all the candle darkness inside lost."




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Elizabeth
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 12:37 pm
Elizabeth says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 12:37 pm
Oh my god I actually AM crying
I swear to god....
WHAT'S WRONG WITH YOU??!!
*Sobs*




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Jerikas
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 12:42 pm
Jerikas says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 12:42 pm
you write in text talk and don't check your work, this annoys me but the story is cool
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 2:28 pm
Duskglimmer says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 2:28 pm
Smaur... *shakes head sadly* I'm afraid that I have to break some bad news to you. This story... it's sort of, kind of, possibly might be, just a little teeny tiny bit... bad. And I mean that in a good way.

Let me know if you want a full critique of this. I'm sure I can come up with SOMETHING to nitpick.
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 2:54 pm
Rei says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 2:54 pm
I believe we have the makings of a wonderful satirist.
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 5:09 pm
Ego says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 5:09 pm
Smaur...dear...you're scaring me greatly.
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 5:20 pm
Caligula's Launderette says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 5:20 pm
Oh wow, smaur, that was just... there are no words... it was, tear tear *sniffle sniffle* and then the monster was like... bwahhhhhh!

You are my hero. I felt so connected. Here share the bunk with Apollo, Helo, Starbuck, Wash and Rammstein.

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Misty
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Fri Mar 31, 2006 6:23 pm
Misty says... · Fri Mar 31, 2006 6:23 pm
heeheehee....

There are no words....simply none...

*tear*

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