Always and forever

Never say 'I Love You'
If you really do not care.
Never talk about having feelings,
If they aren't truly there!

Never hold my hand
If you're just gonna break my heart.
Never claim you're going to,
If you never plan to start!

Never look into my eyes,
If all you do is lie.
Never even say 'Hello'
If you really mean 'Goodbye'

If you really mean forever
Then fail after saying you'll try.
NEVER say forever because
Forever usually ends up making me cry!

Aww! I love this poem! I find that most rhyming poetry tends to be clumpy and disjointed and corny...however this one was different...it flowed beautifully! I have only one nitpick...

racingforever10 wrote:Never hold my hand
If you're just gonna break my heart. - this sentence seems too long for the stanza, try: 'If you're going to break my heart.'
Never claim you're going to,
If you never plan to start!

*like* and happy writing!
~ Amelia

thank you very much I am tryign to post more...

I love it. It make a lot of sense.

Never say 'I Love You'
If you really do not care.

This is so true. So many people say it when they don't even mean it.

Keep on writing, can't wait to read more.

thank you.. I am waiting to get points to be able to.... I loved that line to thought that it was very true also...

Hallie,
I absolutley love this poem, my style...as you know is not rhyming, but you have done it so nicely.
I really love this poem, and defintley can relate to this as I'm sure many others can, good work!

I want to quote this...if that's okay with you. Can't wait to read more!

yes you can that is fine with me, I am trying my hardest to get more points to be able to post another poem.... I loved this poem to that's why I put it on there...

It is beautiful!
Keep writing
~FW~

thank you, freewritersavvy.. I do keep keeping of things I have found one poem not sure when I am going to post it though... but it will probably be today..

I loved it. "Don't hold my hand if you're gonna break my heart" I think a lot of girls would like to tell that to a guy.

I loved it. The message was so true! I think that guys and girls do this to eachother so often, and it isn't right. Why pretend to be n a relationhip? It's jut hurting everyone. You did a great job conveying this, and it was really good. Keep writing!

Aweeh. It was so sweet and true. Im sure girls and guys would love to say this to someone. I know I would. Please keep writing, you're really good

Never even say 'Hello'
If you really mean 'Goodbye'

that is the most true. my favorite line is that one. <3

Never say 'I Love You'
If you really do not care.
Never talk about having feelings,
If they aren't truly there!

Never hold my hand
If you're just gonna break my heart.
Never claim you're going to,
If you never plan to start!

Never look into my eyes,
If all you do is lie.
Never even say 'Hello'
If you really mean 'Goodbye'

If you really mean forever
Then fail after saying you'll try.
NEVER say forever because
Forever usually ends up making me cry![/quote]

Nice poem! I liked it. It felt very personal (to you). A few things I don't like are the sudden change in beats and rhythm, but other than that I don't see spelling mistakes. Keep up the good work!

Yes and I hate it when that happens that is one reason why I posted that I thought It was a very good for people with relationships

Hello racingforever10,
This is reall a good poem you have here! The emotion and diction match well. The ony thig hat caught mye ye as something you mght want to consider fixing is the last ine.

Forever usually ends up making me cry!

To me,this sems to be too long a lin to fi with the rest ofthe poem. Maybe somehing like Forever makes me cry! would fit better. Other than that, anything I could say would be repeating your well-deserved cogradulations.

~TheManintheHat