Always and forever

thank you very much... But i kind of had a hard tme reading what you wrote because either you left a letter off a word or something like that...

Never say "I Love You"
If you really do not care. Great start
Never talk about having feelings,
If they aren't truly there! This line is a little awkward and I don't think you need an exclamation point at the end of it.

If you never plan to start!

Again, you don't really need this exclamation point.

Never even say "Hello"
If you really mean "Goodbye".

This was a pretty good poem.

You had great emotion and good flow almost all the way through.
The last stanza is really odd though. It seems like there should've been another line before the first one and the flow is all weird in it...

But, it was pretty good anyways

Keep writing,
Alzora

Thank you very much!!

Awww I love it........very nice. I also can totally relate too. Keep on posting! <3

Okay thank you I am trying... right now I am starting to right another poem at home it will be posted before wednesday!! Not sure what the title will be yet though I am still trying to think about that..

Pretty good. It shows a good point. Is also hard to say things with rhyming poetry and i think that u explained it very well.

Very good, an impressive piece of work. Keep it up.
I hope to see more works like this from you.
You'll go far kid, you'll go to the stars!

Anyway, congratulations on this piece of work and I can see this is very popular.

I love the rhythm of the words, the rhymes fit nicely into your poem. I also like the truth in it, because these days these words are true. hope this review helps a little!!!!

I really don't think I can say much else that hasn't already been said, other than I really liked this. It's so true to real life. I also loved the perfect flow with the rhyming, because sometimes that can get shaky. Great job, and keep it up!

Well, I'm being honest right now, hope you're not one of those people to take it strong, but I didn't like it. The point you were trying to show was clear, and it was a good point, but the way you wrote was kind of flimsy (excuse my vocabulary).
It was weak and lacking emotion. The last line -

"Forever usually ends up making me cry!"


broke the rhythm (non-existent rhythm).
Again, you might want to consider the wording. And no hard feelings.

i love it!!
this is soooooo TRUE (all caps) hahaaha

Never say "I Love You"
If you really do not care. ----> i think "Don't" was more appropriate
Never talk about having feelings,
If they aren't truly there

Thank you everyone I love this poem...

thank you:)

Quick comment:)
I really liked this poem and I wouldn't change anything about it.
It really shows how many things you have to go through in life to get to the good parts.
I could really feel the emotion coming through it as the words flowed out.
Overall, I really thought you used all the right words and I wouldn't change anything about it.
Keep writing:)

This is really great, I think it's a poem everyone can relate to, and it's really nicely portrayed.

Never say 'I Love You'
If you really do not care.
Never talk about having feelings,
If they aren't truly there!

Never hold my hand
If you're just gonna break my heart. (This line is too long. If you have to read it to fit the rhythm, you have to read it in a way that sounds weird and awkward)
Never claim you're going to,
If you never plan to start!

Never look into my eyes, (I really love this verse! It just flows so beautifully when you read it!)
If all you do is lie.
Never even say 'Hello'
If you really mean 'Goodbye'

If you really mean forever
Then fail after saying you'll try.
NEVER say forever because
Forever usually ends up making me cry! (This it too long too. Maybe you could try something like, "Forever usaually makes me cry!" or something like that! But forever makes me cry too!)

I really love this, it's very truthful and sad, but also very beautiful!