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Apple's Fantastic Review Emporium

Are you looking for a review? Are you sick an tired of waking to realise that your short story/poem/novel/art work hasn't been review? Are you sick of other peoples work being liked and your left in the dump? That's all about to change with; Apple's Fantastic Review Emporium. You hear right! A new, flashy (alright, revived) emporium has arrived (come back)! A place where all your unwanted things will be reviewed and liked - one hundred percent guarantee - by me; Apple, your friendly reviewer.

Your work will be reviewed in the next twenty-four hours once you've placed down a request.* Not forty-eight hours, not the next week; but straight away! Yes this is one reviewing emporium you can really R-A-V-E too! With a trusted review as myself you'll have no troubles, none what so ever.

Rules and Regulations:

-If I do something wrong I.E. Grammatical or spelling wise, please pm me and tell me what I've done because their is nothing more stupid then a reviewer acting smart about something completely wrong.
-What I comment upon or say is not supposed to come in any kind of offence. If it does, PM me in private and we'll discuss don't paste across my guess book that I'm some beep!
-All works should not be ones that are foul of language, horrifyingly sexual or just past the 18+ mark.
-As I am religious, stories condemning God or any religion is just not worth my attention. I'm sorry, but I will just not review anything on those terms.
-Forgive me for trying to sound smart through the review.

Explanation of my reviews:

Throughout my review I'll be focussing on two very important parts; your grammar/spelling and the plot/arc of your chapter (or what ever). There will three steps which I'll be going to through:

I. Grammar/Spelling

This will be just me going through and nitpicking all the little mistakes you've made.

"I am a boy!" cried the boy.

After the quote I'll go into an indepth analysis of what you've done wrong and the proper way to go through with this. The fixing will be highlighted in red as seen above.

II. Plot/Arc

Here I'll just be commenting on what I think about your story so far and how I think you could improve it.

III. Overall

This is just my overall opinion of your work.

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[b]Name of short story/poem/novel/art work: [/b]
[b]Genre:[/b]
[b]Quick Synopsis:[/b]
[b]Other:[/b]


*Review time will only be lengthened if I am unable to reach a computer.

Could you please review my story...if you have time.

Raven High Link~ topic61816.html

Thankyou

Done and done, Codie! I'm up for another review....Anyone?

Hi, I just finished a very short novella, fantasy with some romantica, if you feel so inclined...
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Okay Nap, I'm done. And about time....I have to do shubi's now. I've been so busy...who's next?

Why hello ther Apple, dear

Could you be ever so kind and reviewthis for me please? It's the second chapter to my romance novel and it's a bit... meh. Also, if it's not too much, could you also review the first chapter? The link to it's in the post of the second chapter.

Thanks in advance,

Skins xoxo

P.S sorry about the creepy face at the start... I'm cool. K?

Here you go, Skins. Sorry for the late review, I never check this forum. Oooo probably shouldn't have said that...but don't worry people I will from now on!

No one wants a review?

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^^ if you wouldn't mind
Just ignore the messed up tense thing, this is an earlier version and the newer one is on a different computer. I may post if I get around to it.

Hi there Apple. I have been writing a novel for a while now. If you're really thirst for ding the reviews then you can try that out, though there have been six chapters. Anyways, you may turn it down. and I don;'t want reviews for prologue, ch-1, 2, 3. So if you could just check grammar for the remaining(if you don't wanna do the story), then I would be ever grateful to you. The link is in my signature!
Thanks in advance!

~Shubhi

Sorry for the late reply. I forgot to check it again!

@ finishedmakingsense-I am done with the review.
@Shubi-Your will take a 'lil time, cause I want to do it well. Though, I'll have it up soon. I must say though, it is very good! (I'm reading it from the beginning)

Hey Apple

Fancy doing me another review?

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It's the sixth chapter, is that okay? You might have to read the others first to help you understand what's going on. If you don't want to, that's fine!

Thanks a bunch!
xoxo Skins

Thanks for the review Apple! It was helpful... sister.

Thanks again sister.

xxx

No problem.

Who's next, I'm ready to review!

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Could you review this please?