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pudin.junidf
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Mon Oct 12, 2009 2:39 am
pudin.junidf says... · Mon Oct 12, 2009 2:39 am
and not so adolescents

Need to review, anything please, just need it. Please!!

Make me review!

I'll review
All Kinds of Poetry
-Dramatic
-Lyric
-Narrative
-Other
Fantasy Fiction
Other Fiction
Science Fiction
Historical Fiction (not much though)
Action Adventure Fiction
Romantic Fiction

I do not review
Non-Fiction
Other
Scripts
Lyrics

What I might review
Art and Photography (I don't have much experience in it, but I can surely give you my opinion and tell you what can be improved)
Advanced Critiques (depends on my time, but I would definitely give it a try.)

So I'm not that into harsh reviews, I don't like them but...that doesn't mean I don't give them, well rearely. I am a grammar, characterization, character development, description, style freak. But I'm not harsh, only when I see a work that has potential and it hasn't been fully developed.

So send me the link and I'll be there as soon as possible. When you receive the review, please send me a PM to let me know, ok?

So are you ready to send me reviews?
On your marks, get set, send!!
Les sanglots longs
Des violons
De l'autonne
Blessent mon coeur
D'une langueur
Monotone.
Verlaine




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Mo.
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Mon Oct 12, 2009 2:32 pm
Mo. says... · Mon Oct 12, 2009 2:32 pm
Hey Pudin! I would like a review on my story in Romantic Fiction. Here's the link: Love Sucks
Thanks xD
~Mo.
Mo. was here. :) mwahahaha




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pudin.junidf
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Tue Oct 13, 2009 12:49 am
pudin.junidf says... · Tue Oct 13, 2009 12:49 am
Done. some more? Please!!
Les sanglots longs
Des violons
De l'autonne
Blessent mon coeur
D'une langueur
Monotone.
Verlaine




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frozencyberspace
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Wed Oct 14, 2009 3:31 am
frozencyberspace says... · Wed Oct 14, 2009 3:31 am
Hey there.
I'd be much gratified if you'd review this -
topic53688.html
Thanks!
He said, "Oh yes, you can. Just hold my hand. I think that that would help,"
so I sat with him a while and then I asked him how he felt. He said, "I think I'm cured. In fact, I'm sure. Thank you, stranger, for your therapeutic smile."




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brassnbridle
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Wed Oct 14, 2009 11:28 pm
brassnbridle says... · Wed Oct 14, 2009 11:28 pm
Hi, would you mind reading my fantasy?
topic53526.html
If there's a book you really want to read, but it hasn't been written yet, then you must write it.~Toni Morrison

It is written in m life-blood, such as that is, thick or thin; I can do no other~ Tolkien




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brassnbridle
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Thu Oct 15, 2009 12:20 pm
brassnbridle says... · Thu Oct 15, 2009 12:20 pm
well hopefully this works:
topic53526.html
If there's a book you really want to read, but it hasn't been written yet, then you must write it.~Toni Morrison

It is written in m life-blood, such as that is, thick or thin; I can do no other~ Tolkien




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pudin.junidf
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Fri Oct 16, 2009 10:31 pm
pudin.junidf says... · Fri Oct 16, 2009 10:31 pm
Done, some more please!!
Les sanglots longs
Des violons
De l'autonne
Blessent mon coeur
D'une langueur
Monotone.
Verlaine




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PatriciaTina
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Sat Oct 17, 2009 9:32 pm
PatriciaTina says... · Sat Oct 17, 2009 9:32 pm
Hi! I just posted a prologue for my new story. It's not that long, but it's a very very rough draft. Please be as harsh as you like! Also, I'm not really liking the title that much. If you have any suggestions, feel free to tell me!

Anyways, here's the link: The Real World - Prologue

Thankies in advance!

~ Trish :elephant:
~ Patricia Tina :smt006

Don't look in the spoiler.

Spoiler
I lost the game.

"I always hear punch me in the face when you're speaking, but it's usually subtext."
~ Dr. John Watson




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pudin.junidf
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Sun Oct 18, 2009 12:08 am
pudin.junidf says... · Sun Oct 18, 2009 12:08 am
Done with the last one, give me-give me-more!!

lol. Britney Spears Song.
Les sanglots longs
Des violons
De l'autonne
Blessent mon coeur
D'une langueur
Monotone.
Verlaine




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pudin.junidf
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Reviews 180
Mon Oct 19, 2009 10:59 pm
pudin.junidf says... · Mon Oct 19, 2009 10:59 pm
Some more, please!!!! ***Dies***
:thud:
Les sanglots longs
Des violons
De l'autonne
Blessent mon coeur
D'une langueur
Monotone.
Verlaine




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airbear320
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Mon Oct 19, 2009 11:12 pm
airbear320 says... · Mon Oct 19, 2009 11:12 pm
Hey! I really need a good review on the first chapter of my book (one that actually tells me how to improve). But in order for that chapter to make sense will you also take a look at the prologue? Thanks! (Oh, and bear with me because I'm not sure how to make a link to it)

Prologue
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=53013

Chapter One
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=53249

If those links didn't work you can probably find them both under my profile under "The Elements: Secrets of the River" folder.

Thank you tons! :D
"Without hard work, nothing grows but weeds."
-Gordon B. Hinckley




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hero
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Tue Oct 20, 2009 12:26 pm
hero says... · Tue Oct 20, 2009 12:26 pm
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53808.html

Its an Other Fiction piece; also, I'd like to have your opinion on a title idea. Please?
This guy is so evil you could put him in between two slices of bread and call him an evil sandwich.

Coming at you like a jetpack Shakespeare.

Hero's Reviews
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic53905.html




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Young gun
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Tue Oct 20, 2009 11:09 pm
Young gun says... · Tue Oct 20, 2009 11:09 pm
A review on this would really help:

topic53783.html
Too bad we don't live to experinece death




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pudin.junidf
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Sat Oct 24, 2009 10:23 pm
pudin.junidf says... · Sat Oct 24, 2009 10:23 pm
Totally over those, now some more, please I'm starving!!

Please, more reviews!!
Les sanglots longs
Des violons
De l'autonne
Blessent mon coeur
D'une langueur
Monotone.
Verlaine




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pudin.junidf
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Reviews 180
Sun Oct 25, 2009 10:48 pm
pudin.junidf says... · Sun Oct 25, 2009 10:48 pm
More please, I need more!!
Please!

Need more :shock: Need More :shock: Need More :shock:
Les sanglots longs
Des violons
De l'autonne
Blessent mon coeur
D'une langueur
Monotone.
Verlaine

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