Haiku Train

BarrettBenedict · 2009-04-26T07:14:14Z

This is pretty simple and can be lots of fun. The premise is you take the last line of the haiku before yours and make it the first as yours. It doesn't necessarily have to be the exact line either. If you can cleverly change it in subtle ways so that it rhymes or sounds the same that is also cool. Example: This is a haiku five, seven, five syllables would be the format ... could be a doormat were it not for the large head must be tiger's skin etc. So here's a starter haiku: old film reels rotate monochrome images of what dogs imagine

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Sun May 22, 2022 8:53 pm

Starve says... · Sun May 22, 2022 8:53 pm

falls forward and spills
all of dusk's fading grief in-
to a sea awe-ringed.

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orange sorta rhymes with awe-ringed, right?

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Kelisot

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Mon May 23, 2022 3:10 am

Kelisot says... · Mon May 23, 2022 3:10 am

to a sea awe-ringed
i hold your fleece-covered hand
touch and love my body

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No sexual innuendos or overtones here, but sorry if it sounds like it. I have no intention of making it sound "dirty".

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NewHope

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Mon May 23, 2022 3:22 am

NewHope says... · Mon May 23, 2022 3:22 am

(Hm... now I have to use that last line as well... hm...)

Touch and love my body;
Our breath shivers like starlight's
Glittering fires

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Mon May 23, 2022 7:25 am

Liminality says... · Mon May 23, 2022 7:25 am

Glittering fires,
a cold night in the valley
by the rushing stream.

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NewHope

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Mon May 23, 2022 8:41 am

NewHope says... · Mon May 23, 2022 8:41 am

By the rushing stream
Swallows yawn and loudly sigh
Like old stars resting

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Kelisot

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Mon May 23, 2022 11:22 am

Kelisot says... · Mon May 23, 2022 11:22 am

Like old stars resting
Then bursting with a great BOOM
A supernova

I like Gabber. I recommend that you should also listen to it.

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NewHope

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Mon May 23, 2022 12:53 pm

NewHope says... · Mon May 23, 2022 12:53 pm

a supernova
shatters into a million
shards of starry skies

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Starve

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Mon May 23, 2022 2:12 pm

Starve says... · Mon May 23, 2022 2:12 pm

shards of starry skies
shards to scarry ties of wood
please don't kill the tree!

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NewHope

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Mon May 23, 2022 3:10 pm

NewHope says... · Mon May 23, 2022 3:10 pm

Please don't kill the tree
Not many are left, please don't;
Remember the birds

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Kelisot

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Mon May 23, 2022 5:34 pm

Kelisot says... · Mon May 23, 2022 5:34 pm

Remember the birds
Who soars with majestic wings
The guard of the sky

I like Gabber. I recommend that you should also listen to it.

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NewHope

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Mon May 23, 2022 5:38 pm

NewHope says... · Mon May 23, 2022 5:38 pm

The guard of the sky
Lifts whispers and shields and spears
To battle storm clouds

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Kelisot

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Mon May 23, 2022 6:52 pm

Kelisot says... · Mon May 23, 2022 6:52 pm

To battle storm clouds
Bring a sunny sword and shield
And fight through your way!

I like Gabber. I recommend that you should also listen to it.

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Mon May 23, 2022 7:23 pm

Valkyria says... · Mon May 23, 2022 7:23 pm

And fight through your way;
the broken memories of
the past burden you

There is always something left to love.
- One Hundred Years of Solitude

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Mon May 23, 2022 8:47 pm

alliyah says... · Mon May 23, 2022 8:47 pm

the past burdens you.
i see when your shoulders hunch
again; you're weighed down

you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now

but i have promised to return

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Kelisot

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Mon May 23, 2022 11:21 pm

Kelisot says... · Mon May 23, 2022 11:21 pm

again you're weighed down
the scale of justice has answered
you are a sinner

I like Gabber. I recommend that you should also listen to it.

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