Young Writers Society

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Oh for frikin' Pete's sake, it's okay to have a little limelight now and then. The world isn't comepletely equal, or fair, or anything of the like. If it were there'd be quite a number fewer wars. And no poverty... wow, that'd be nice...

But anyways, I guess that was my fault, wording it like that. So let's all just try to keep our characters from being Silver Age Supermans, where nothing can beat them and they're the ones who save the day all the time, single handedly, with both hands tied behind their backs. Be realistic, and you are fine.

Apollogies!

**I want to make this interesting!**

Maribelle

A ripple rushed through my body, it was a wave of emotion. Grinding my teeth I urged the scream trying to escape my lips back down. It was never-ending. Pain, doubt, self-pity, hopelessness, sadness, frustration, shock, and even more that i couldn't possibly describe. They sent me into a twitching state while i sat on a beach chair.

Tears rolled down my cheeks and anger rose through me. All i could do was hope that nobody would bother me at this exact moment in time. I felt as if my body weren't mine anymore, everyone else around me had control of it. Being pulled all different kind of ways, I shrieked a painstaking scream.

My eyes rolled to the back of my head and all my body jerked in different directions.

Why?! Why?! The pain! The pain! Oh...please....spare me. That was my last thought before i was thrown out of my chair. The boat had been turned fiercely, I crashed into the side of the boat. Slowly, blacking out as dark bodies surrounded me with grins on their faces.

No. I sent to everyone's mind before all went dark.

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>.> uhhh maybe a tad bit late?

Um...thanks for the "lecture" Tex?

Anyways *clears throat* is someone going to post or should I just keep on blabbing?
I've posted twice wating for someone to say something.

Oh Stolen..that was an intense post. I was like "Oh my God!!!" the whole entire time.

*looks at Tex who's staring back* Um...yeah I know this belongs in DT...sowwy! *puppy eyes*

(:

I think shadow attacks are becoming cliché… ha!

Aw, come on, I’m not that strict, am I? Don’t worry about DT stuff too much. Everything else is loosey-goosey!

Let’s get some funny in here, somewhere, even if it’s over the rainbow.


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-RAVEN-


No.

It rang strong and clear in my mind, like any other telepathic message. It was Mari’s “voice”. I looked at Kelly with words that didn’t even need to be spoken aloud. And we raced out of the room.

We reached the deck, a nice, salty breeze blowing everyone’s hair into their faces. Someone or another was in the pool, and Julie was lounging on a beach chair. And twitching beside the railing was Mari. I ran to her with Kelly at my heels. Getting down on my knees beside her, I held her hand, thinking the best thing to do would be try and calm her down.

Well, that plan didn’t work.

I ended up traveling her subconscious, something that only happens when two telepaths let down their “mind shields”, according to Kelly.

Mari was mentally being attacked by shadows.

And now, so was I.

Hahaha i know they are becoming cliche' but thanks for making the effect Tex! It changes the setting you know?
Oh and really dance? o: i have a lot of fun writing intense, epic scenes 8D
lol now someone needs to get mari AND raven out of this!!!

Maribelle

I was enveloped in a chilled cloud of midnight sky, still in pain. Yet, the sight of the many stars made it less painful. My body was being lifted now, through my unconsciousness i heard maniacal laughter. A jolt told me they had dropped me onto the ground, which felt like shattered glass.

Mari, you must guide the others. A gentle voice spoke, i recognized it easily. It was my mother, the one who hadn't been taken by the shadows.

Before i could eagerly even say the word mom a piercing pain stabbed into my skull, making me gasp for air. A sound I'd never even heard in my life arose from my throat. It was like a person in a desert trying to scream, shredding deep into my throat.

What did you...do mom? I questioned hoarsely, feeling warm fluid down the front of my forehead.

Just business darlin' you should know that. Lead them. Lead them. Lead them The stranger shadow chanted.

Tears came to my eyes as i realized i had been tricked, what a fool was i to actually believe. The shadows chanted the same two words for what seemed like hours and hours.

Lead them.

Yeah, intense scenes are THE best thing to write. So fun!

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-RAVEN-

I stood in a place that I'd never wanted to go back to again: my childhood. This wasn't right. I knew I had entered Mari's subconcious, but... I had never known her in my childhood. She wouldn't know this.

I heard a knock at the door.

"Laura! Let me in this minute!" It was my mom.

Out of old habit I shakily went over and opened the door. In my family, you would learn quickly to answer mom and dad. Or else.

"There you are," she said like I had only been gone a few minutes instead of years. "I want you to join me and my friends for some cards."

"Huh?" I asked, still dumbfounded.

"Join us."

It clicked in my mind.

"You aren't real," I weakly said. "You're a shadow."


The scene changed.


A girl was skipping rope down a sidewalk while singing Cinderella Dressed in Yella. It was Anna, my only friend when I was five. Suddenly, a swarm of shadows came charging down the street, headed towards her. She turned, and when she saw them, screamed,

"Laura! Come! Save me!"

Come. This is all a trap.

"No."

I had to go through watching her be taken for the second time. It was amost unbearable.


The scene dissapeared. I ended up in a white room, no walls, no ceiling, but a floor that went on forever. Yet those walls that didn't exist and the ceiling you couldn't see were white. They were there, but... they weren't... I saw Mari talking to a shadow, but I doubted that she saw it like that. I walked over to her. Only alone can you go insane, and insanity is all you. We needed to stick together.

"Mari," I whispered, but the sound didn't come out of my mouth. I mouthed the words, but they were mentally spoken. She turned to see what had said that, looking right at me, searching, but never finding. I was invisible to her. Great.

"Mari, it's me, Raven," I said touching her shoulder. Well, she could feel me, since she jumped back. "I'm serious. I'm in your subconcious, and you're in mine, and I'm in mine, and you're in yours. Make any sense?"

She nodded, saying "Who are you? Where are you?"

"Are you deaf? I just said I'm Raven!"

"Yeah, that sounds like you."

"I've just fought off my attacks, and I don't exactly know where I am. Whatever you see is an illusion, Maribelle. Don't trust it... oh... no... heck, no! Mari, fight 'em! Say they're not real! Now!"

Shadows. Were. Everywhere. Probably because I've just been a shadow condominium for half my life. Probably because they were attacking us. But whatever, they couldn't do anything physical to you in your mind. It's just if you die in your subconcious, you go into a coma and never wake up. That wasn't exactly helpful.

"You aren't real... You're a lie..." I heard Maribelle say. It wasn't helping.


What was going to happen to us?

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The sky has been white for the past week in my neighborhood, and it's driving me crazy... afgaluirglafgaldurgalfbeufalurlsacnqwoiery!

Hey…
I was wondering can we forget that Julie’s family was killed.
I came up with new idea so yeah…
I don’t think it’ll interfere with the others posts except for maybe Joseph’s since they were related to Julie.
Please?
*So her family never died*

So...is that okay Tex???

So does that mean she is still rich, and would no longer hate (or dislike) Ballow for being a spoiled brat?

I mean her "adopted family"
Not her real one.
The one with her bff Emilie.

Oh, okay then.

*Stares at JD and Bolt weirdly* Why... not... on... Discussion thread?? Yeah, that's fine. But let's just land this boat and have action that doesn't directly involve shadows! Woohoo!

First, Raven and Mari have to be saved. It's not the kind of thing you can just go and wake them up from. Though I'm not exactly sure HOW to get them out of this...


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ON THE DISCUSSION THREAD! IT'S EVEN A RULE! ANOTHER DISCUSSION POST ON HERE AND I'LL MAKE YOU ALLL STAND IN THE CORNER! Except you, Hearts, you said you would post later.

Sorry I'm gonna have ta drop out, you can do whatever you want to my guys.

BOLT! D:< Dont scare me like that ;0;
-smacks-
meanie D;
Lawl once mari gets out of her state ballow or gary should become friends with mari :'D
She has like no friends other than raven >.>
[[will post here for story when i think of something as to save up room ]]

I was Just kidding, I wanted to see the response I would get if i Dropped out, And I have to say "Yay people love Gary and Ballow, Yay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"