The Happy

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LOL!!!! Gold Star abound for making me laugh for the first time today!!
YAY FOR HAPPY!!!
xoxo
* Catch a Falling Star
* Put It in Your Pocket
* Never Let It Fade Away...
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I am grinning now, like some idiot described in the poem. One suggestion: try shortening it a little. Too much of this is really overkill. In the first half, I was giggling madly, but by the end I was over it. A shorter version would end with the reader bawling their eyes out and rolling on the floor.

This is a pretty cool format, a parody, I guess. This is great!




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I love it, I love it, I love it! My cat was sitting on my lap while I read this and she had to get up because I was shaking so much from laughing! Thank you! You have saved me from the usual depressing poetry! And then there's love poetry, which sometimes makes me more depressed. But this is just.... hilarious! I love it =]
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Don't bump threads more than two months old, especially when you have nothing more to say than "I like this".

And unlike Prokaryote's thread, I can actually close this one, so...




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Ack, I didn't realize how much earlier this was written! For some reason, I missed it when it first came up on YWS. In any case, thanks for donating this poem to Spun Yarn! It's a really bizarre and twisted, yet horrifically cheery piece that would make anyone smile. :)
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Wow, this is hilarious! I love it!
Nike :)
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*Clicks Like*

This poetry is amazing. I love the way the title gives it a very sinister touch, and yet the poem itself cancels that out with it's light-heartedness. Carry on writing. A world with this sort of poetry in it is a better world.
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anti-pop wrote:Happy, happy, happy!
That's the way I am,
Laughing, grinning, giggles!
I smile because I can!
(This stanza have got the marks wrong, you should have a comma in the first line and a dot instead of a comma otherwise it sounds wrong. And also the third line should contain a comma at the end I think. And this goes for all your stanzas since they seem to be built the same way.

Love, love, love!
That's my favorite thing,
Hearts, flowers, chocolate!
I swear, I could just sing!

Rainbows, rainbows, rainbows!
Oh, don't they bring such joy?
Sunshine, sparkles, happiness!
I'm only here to annoy—

Oh, dear.

So sorry if you read the above,
I forgot to take my pills
How did you manage to get through that?
Did you know that stuff can kill?

An overdose of Happy
Can permanently damage the brain—
Perhaps you should see a doctor
And from this poetry refrain,

I would suggest this highly,
In fact, you should take heed,
This amount of joy
I hope you'll never read.

Go on and find something else
To pass the time away
Because if you continue this,
Believe me, you will pay

Oh look, I'm out of medication
I used the last just now
What consequences will this have?
Oh, I wonder how—

I feel The Happy coming in!
Quick, run away! Go!
How much longer can I suppress this?
Not even I can know—!

Hello there! Are you feeling glum?
Perhaps I can help out!
I love rainbows, ponies and sugary sweets!
Of this I have no doubt!

Let's be friends! We'll be the best!
I can assure you this!
What's that, you say? Speak up, my friend!
My other self you miss?

Oh, I see. I understand now,
It's all perfectly clear—
You use me up then spit me out,
How could you do this, dear?

All I wanted was to make you smile!
That I promise is my mission,
But I suppose you're in denial
And you, my friend, won't listen (dot here?)
(I'm not really the best reviewer... I guess all the !!! should work, but still I think it's confusing, and the commas always seem to occure at the wrong places.. ;)
So go read your dark depressing works,
That speak of woe and night,
I'll just be here, waiting alone
But when the time is right...

I shall reprimand! Oh yes, I shall
And you WILL see the day
When happiness, rainbows, and lots of love
Will make you all pay!


Haha, I loved it, it was very entertaining and funny to read, espically since it was as I saw it, someone writing the poem and while writing her mood changed... It was fun, and the poem was very good xDD
"Some say the world will end in fire;
Some say in ice.
From what I've tasted of desire
I hold with those who favor fire.
But if it had to perish twice,
I think I know enough of hate
To say that for destruction ice
Is also great
And would suffice." - Robert Frost




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I loved the sarcasm and, as everybody else has said, the transition between the emotions.
I think poetry is particlarly hard to be funny in so that's seriously impressive! I wish I could write something like that!
Loved, loved, loved it. I laughed out loud.




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I love this poem. It is one of the most hilarious poems I have ever read on YWS. Your poem describes the state of mania in the main character really well. Hopefully you write some more poems like this so poetry doesn't have to be so depressing.You just made my day. :smt003 Fiction




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This was a great poem. One of the best that I've read in a while!

It was hilarious. I seriously couldn't stop laughing.

Good job!

- RedRaven




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i am sorry. maybe i am just a synic or grumpy, but i didn't really care for this very much. i dont want to make it seem as if i just am a pouting jerk who just "doesnt like this," because it isnt helpful; i am going to list some things about this to reach a conclusion.
-you did a great job rhyming
-it didnt use words in a way that they would create a picture.
-i liked the abruptness of it.
-i liked that you used the irony of the first part to create the 2nd part.
-it seemed very rushed, to me, like i couldnt read it fast enough.
on closer inspection, i suppose i do like this.
Hellodilly-odilly, there!
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Hi anti-pop i am CaptianRandom
I loved this, it made me feel happy, it was good length and space between paragraphs, i love this poem and i hope to read more of your poems

-CaptianRandom
Last edited by CaptianRandom on Thu Jun 24, 2010 2:11 am, edited 1 time in total.
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loved it, it made me feel happy LOL
"Do not allow people to dim your shine because they are blinded. Tell them to put on some sunglasses"

"I don't want my whole life to be real, so i chose for it not to be"

"You have to not care about the goal, you hgave to love the process"
- All from Lady GaGa




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I love, love, love this!!!!
And apparently everyone else does too!
Congrats on having 50 likes!
(which is actually going to turn to 51 after I post this reply.)
Nothing to critique.
Yup, absolutely nothing. :)
Please, please, please, please, keep writing.
And don't take your pills!!!!!!!!
Jane Thermopolis
Apple of my soul,
Eats me whole,
Take one bite,
No delight,
Rotting hole.



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