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Sins
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Wed May 27, 2009 7:02 pm
Sins says... · Wed May 27, 2009 7:02 pm
Heya x

Could you critique my fiction for me? It's short so it shouldn't take very long!
Thanks in advance! :wink:

Meg xoxo

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I didn't know what to put here so I put this.




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Mars
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Sat May 30, 2009 5:11 pm
Mars says... · Sat May 30, 2009 5:11 pm
Finished! Two more til I get my fifth star, guys, let's make it happen tonight.
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Writing for love is a pas
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Fri Jun 05, 2009 1:13 am
Writing for love is a pas says... · Fri Jun 05, 2009 1:13 am
Hi again!! =] I really need help! If you could look at this....

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Thanks so much!!
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Crouching Tuna
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Sat Jun 06, 2009 2:27 pm
Crouching Tuna says... · Sat Jun 06, 2009 2:27 pm
Hello there
Please have a review on my first piece here, which is a prologue to a story called Book of Raziel.


It's fantasy, a little bit of sci-fi, but most definitely a lot of ideologies in it(but none of them yet on the prologue.

Here's a link
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Cheers
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Demeter
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Sun Jun 07, 2009 7:15 pm
Demeter says... · Sun Jun 07, 2009 7:15 pm
Marscars!

topic49072.html <-- a poem

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octocoffee
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Mon Jun 08, 2009 2:16 am
octocoffee says... · Mon Jun 08, 2009 2:16 am
When you have the time, if you could review my poem, that'd be appreciated. Ripping it to shreds with criticism would be adored. Thanks!

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Mon Jun 08, 2009 2:43 pm
gsppcrocks10 says... · Mon Jun 08, 2009 2:43 pm
Hey, can you please review my story? topic48480.html There are other chapters too just so you know.
Just another quack spouting psychobabble.

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Mars
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Mon Jun 08, 2009 8:13 pm
Mars says... · Mon Jun 08, 2009 8:13 pm
Crouching Tuna and Writing for love is a pas are done!

Dmtzr, octocoffee, gsppcrocks, and Merlin, I probably won't be able to do yours tomorrow but I'll try - should be able to get to them Wednesday. Kind of a busy week ahead.
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LordLoredaen
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Wed Jun 10, 2009 5:57 pm
LordLoredaen says... · Wed Jun 10, 2009 5:57 pm
Hiya!
I really need someone to review this:
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post563980.html#563980
It's one of the only chapters in my novel that I'm not sure about.
Thanks!
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Am fear nach gleidh na h-airm san t-sith, cha bhi iad aige 'n am a' chogaidh.

* He that keeps not his arms in time of peace will have none in time of war.


(This pretty much means "If you want peace, be prepared for war")




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mimimac
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Sat Jun 13, 2009 6:27 am
mimimac says... · Sat Jun 13, 2009 6:27 am
pleasee review, it's being ignored for whatever reason >.<
It's not even mega long or something.
Ahh well...

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Thanks Marzi, I appreciate it :D
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Carlito
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Mon Jun 15, 2009 1:15 am
Carlito says... · Mon Jun 15, 2009 1:15 am
Could you review this for me?
topic45292.html

It's kind of a lot so take your time. You can be as evil or picky as you want. Some of them really suck and need work I think, but I need outside eyes to help. :)
I'll be happy to give you points/hugs/reviews in return!

Thanks a lot :)

-Carly
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rae222
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Mon Jun 15, 2009 4:35 pm
rae222 says... · Mon Jun 15, 2009 4:35 pm
Hello! I really need this reviewed. topic49243.html

Its chapter two and if you want it to make sense then chapter one is right here: topic49104.html




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Angels-Symphony
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Wed Jun 24, 2009 8:13 pm
Angels-Symphony says... · Wed Jun 24, 2009 8:13 pm
Looks like your popular with reviews, Mars xD

If you don't mind, I'd like a review ;)


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Fri Jun 26, 2009 7:51 pm
Chloe(: says... · Fri Jun 26, 2009 7:51 pm
May you please review this piece?

Thank you!
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