Critiques by Canislupis [Closed]

canislupis · 2008-12-18T04:24:49Z

Welcome to Critiques by Canislupis! Doesn't that sound like the name of an over-priced clothing store? Anyway. Unsure? Look at my shiny reviewer badges! . . . . . . . . Done looking? Now ask for a review! My critiques are free, and I generally go through briefly, looking for typos, etc. Then I give overall comments with what I think can be approved. If you have something in particular for me to evaluate, please ask. Here's what I like to review: General Fiction/Other fiction Fantasy fiction (PLEASE no vampires unless you're a really, really good writer and have never read Stephanie Meyer. I don't like fantasy war stories much either, unless they're the medieval type) Historical fiction Action/Adventure fiction (Again, don't like war stories much) Art/photography (Don't expect anything in depth) I will, but prefer not to review: Romantic fiction (Especially if it has vampires in it :roll: ) Science fiction (nothing Star-trekky, but futuristic stuff is ok) I will not review: Fanfiction Non fiction Poetry (I can try, but I know nothing--go elsewhere. :D) Scripts (See poetry) I'd prefer short stories, but I don't mind critiquing novels as long as it's not "chapter 35 part one of 7" or something like that. I love Historical fiction and anything to do with nature/survival/ wild animals. Please give me about a week to give you your review, at which time if I have not responded, feel free to PM me or remind me here. I'll try to get to you as soon as possible. [Edit] Please note that I frequently have eight+ reviews pending, mostly requested via PM (which is harder to keep track of) so if I don't respond right away, that's probably why. If it's been a week, ask again. Thanks! ~Lupis

asxz

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Wed Mar 04, 2009 6:23 pm

asxz says... · Wed Mar 04, 2009 6:23 pm

Okay... could you please review this for me... there isa prologue, but it doesn't have to be read. Thank you!
Title: S.P. 1.1 / S.P.1.2
Genre:
Rating: Zilch
link: Part 1 & Part 2

Thank you immensly!

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canislupis

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Mon Mar 16, 2009 11:32 pm

canislupis says... · Mon Mar 16, 2009 11:32 pm

Sure! You should see the first one up soon.

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LordLoredaen

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Thu Jul 02, 2009 1:15 am

LordLoredaen says... · Thu Jul 02, 2009 1:15 am

Um.... what if I don't have any food?

Am fear nach gleidh na h-airm san t-sith, cha bhi iad aige 'n am a' chogaidh.

* He that keeps not his arms in time of peace will have none in time of war.

(This pretty much means "If you want peace, be prepared for war")

canislupis

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Sun May 16, 2010 10:46 pm

canislupis says... · Sun May 16, 2010 10:46 pm

I can't believe the last post was almost a year ago!

I need more stuff to read, people!

* resurrects thread *

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MiaParamore

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Mon May 17, 2010 1:04 pm

MiaParamore says... · Mon May 17, 2010 1:04 pm

Hi there canislupis. I would love a review on my romantic short-story,Love has No boundaries(I). Thanks for the review in advance and can you take a special look on the dialogue and sentence construction because I'm still a bit weak in those areas. `
~Shubhi

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I might have to bend it back
Or break it, break it off
Next time you point a finger
I'll point you to the mirror"

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canislupis

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Mon May 17, 2010 4:22 pm

canislupis says... · Mon May 17, 2010 4:22 pm

Done!

Any other takers?

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Kale

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Tue May 18, 2010 2:03 am

Kale says... · Tue May 18, 2010 2:03 am

Would you please review Chapter 3 of The Fox and the Prince? There's nothing in particular I'd like you to focus on, so critique away.

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canislupis

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Wed May 19, 2010 2:55 am

canislupis says... · Wed May 19, 2010 2:55 am

And.... Done!

Again, I'm open for business!

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JackpotJohnson

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Fri May 21, 2010 10:01 pm

JackpotJohnson says... · Fri May 21, 2010 10:01 pm

Sneak Peek of: The Yangziat System Mission
By: JackpotJohnson

Thanks that would be great

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canislupis

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Wed May 26, 2010 3:51 pm

canislupis says... · Wed May 26, 2010 3:51 pm

Finished! Sorry I couldn't be more helpful--fanfiction isn't really my thing.

Next?

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Attolia

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Wed May 26, 2010 10:06 pm

Attolia says... · Wed May 26, 2010 10:06 pm

Hey, Canislupis. I like your reviews. I often find myself reviewing a piece after you and agreeing with almost everything you said. So I'd love to get your thoughts on something of mine. The novel I'm working on right now - you can find the prologue through chapter two in my portfolio - is most important to me (if you critique that you can just do a very general, broad review on all I have so far as a whole), but I also just wrote a short story in Historical Fiction Short Stories that needs reviews. So it's up to you, whichever you want to critique; I'd love your thoughts on either.

Sins

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Thu May 27, 2010 8:35 pm

Sins says... · Thu May 27, 2010 8:35 pm

Heya

Will you review some homework of mine please? I want to get it up to a decent standard because of the fact that it is homework. Right now, it's lacking. It's a monologue and it's pretty short, just in case you wanted to know.

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Thanks in advance!

xoxo Rhian

I didn't know what to put here so I put this.

canislupis

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Fri May 28, 2010 6:02 pm

canislupis says... · Fri May 28, 2010 6:02 pm

Skins, yours is done. Hope it helped a bit.

Attolia, yours should be done soon.

-Lupis

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