I like pie ^^

Hi could you review my work?

topic42028.html
topic42270.html
topic42561.html

I only mainly want the last one reviewed but i'm not sure if it will make much sense without reading the other two parts, thankyou so much!

^_^ done. Tell me if you want me to do the first parts after all- I don't mind.
Anyhoo.
Come on people. I'm bored.

Hello! Trying my best to get this particular short story ready for an Advanced Creative Writing class. >_<

I am currently reworking the fourth chapter as it was a large piece of CRAP, but the first three are available to read and I'd appreciate it very much if you'd take a look! ^_^

Here are the links to Unzipped; I, II, and III;

I; topic42656.html
II; topic42657.html
III; topic42658.html

They are rated R for some language, so let me know if that's a problem for you. >_<;

Thank you! <3

-Hannah-

No problem, Hannah. I can swear like a sailor if I put my mind to it. I'll get to it after I've done my chores and stuff XD Hopefully tonight, or in other words in the next eight hours.

Hello, Review please!

Prologue
Chapter 1 Part 1
Chapter 1 Part 2
Chapter 2 Part 1

Rip 'em to shreds and post A.S.A.P

Thank you so much, I desperately need to know if anyone likes it!!!

Hey, Nutty Nice to meet you.

You were recommended to me for reviews so here we go

It's fantasy and so far I have to halves of chapter 1.

topic42148.html part 1
topic43110.html part 2

It is sort of long, I just want some more opinions as it is a writing exercise. Thank you!

I was recommended? Wow. I feel special. Hehe. I'll get on it- if not now, I will have at least one done tonight, if all goes well ^_^

All done. Next?

Gaea 1-8 is up and only Amon has reviewed it so far. Prologue the total failure it is does not need reviewing.

Parts 1-8
topic42699.html
topic42763.html
topic43080.html
topic43224.html
topic43348.html
topic43434.html
topic43485.html
topic43538.html

It'd be great if you could review them all, but 6-8 (and 9 to finish the scene) are definitely R rated. Chapter 8 has a sex scene and generous use of cursing.

Since I seem to have a few errors and I get many of them in editing, please point out what you liked or didn't like rather then just trying to tear into it. Could really use someone's perspective on characters, development and the flow.

If you decide to read it, hope you enjoy it.

How about topic43618.html

here is a little bit about it!

A childish girl who lives in a childish illusion that the world is loving and death doesn't exist. However, when she moves in with her stepmother everything will change. Simply meaning that a man comes along and bursts her bubble. Come and read the horrifying and disturbing horror/comedy about a girl and her neighbor, a homicidal mass murdering maniac!

I hear you are an exceptional reviewer so I'd love your input. Here is the link to my latest work:
topic43879.html It is chapter two, so basically the first chapter is about a younger sister who has a lack of self-esteem and is living in the shadow of her older sister. The chapter ended with the protagonist failing most of her classes and her sister passing all of her classes. If you want a more in depth look feel free to read the first chapter. post505446.html#505446

As always I will be happy to return the favor, if you have anything specific that you'd like critiqued please just PM me with the link. Thank you!!

0.o Guys, I'm so sorry. I've been trying to get back into the rhythm of school... I'll get on it.
Sorry it'll be late, but I'll go start, right now.

I'm done. ^_^

Next?