I like pie ^^

Okay guys, I've been here for a while now, and am now an Instructor, so it is time for me to buckle down and help out!

What I will critique:


-Anything from the fiction forums. i.e Sci-fi, Fantasy, Other fiction etc.

-If you want me to critique fanfiction, however, check if I know what it is based on first, or I'll be lost!

-I'm willing to give my opinion on art, but I'm no guru.

What I won't critique:


- Poetry. I don't know enough about how poetry works to be much use, I'm afraid ^^

-Lyrics. Can't write a song to save myself.

-Scripts

Cost:

I expect nothing in return, and I will do my best to be as much use as possible

First come, first served. I'll post the title of critiqued stories here: (Now hidden, the list was getting long. Click below to check it out)
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-Scavenger 1.1- TL-G Wooster (Oct 30th)
-Scavenger 1.2- TL-G Wooster (Nov 2nd)
-Scavenger 1.3- TL-G Wooster (Nov 2nd)
-Heart's illusion prologue- Maki-Chan (Nov 9th)
***sorry for the delay, have been doing exams***
-Heart's illusion- Maki-Chan (Dec 1st)
-Project Fugato-Reason Invalid (Dec 1st)
-Project Fugato (2)- Reason Invalid (Dec 1st)
-Walking in the dark- LovableLittleSock (Dec 1st)
-Chapter ten, Childhood-wisemann210 (Dec 3rd)
-The Method of Madness-melkor (Dec 3rd)
-Well this shouldn't be! prologue- Lord Anzius (Dec 3rd)
-The mansion chapter 1- Lord Anzius (Dec 4th)
-The mansion chapter 2-Lord Anzius (Dec 6th)
-The ripper prologue-Lord Anzius (Dec 6th)
-Adelade, a prologue- Lost_in_dreamland (Dec 6th)
-Already Won Me- Lilymoore (Dec 8th)
-Dr/Mr Vandergaurd-Kissthewitch (Dec 9th)
-My Dearest Madelyn-anti-pop (Dec 14th)
-Cat steps-Rosey Unicorn (Dec 15th)
-The love Note (heavily edited)- Jamie_rocks (Dec 15th)
-Come back with me-KailiaMarie (Dec 18th)
-Chapter one of my werewolf story- Haruno Sakura (Dec 16th)
-Killer's point of View- LilyJamey (Dec 18th)
-Poison Love-Night Mistress (Dec 18-19th...done over midnight LOL)
-Accidents happen- Kaylyn (Dec 20th)
-Poison Love chapter one-Night Mistress (Dec 21st)
-Well, this shouldn't be chapter one- Lord Anzius (Dec 21st)
-Well, this shouldn't be chapter two- Lord Anzius (Dec 21st)
**sorry. Camping and holiday stuff. ><; ***
-Mansion, chapter three- Lord Anzius (21st January)
-Mansion, chapter four- Lord Anzius (21st Jan)
-Bloodlust- Lucyy (21st Jan)
-Tomorrow Does Not Exist, Part one - JosephDean (23rd Jan)
-Tomorrow Does Not Exist, Part two - JosephDean (23rd Jan)
-Tomorrow Does Not Exist, Part three- JosephDean (25-26th Jan)
-Tomorrow Does Not Exist, Part Four- JosephDean (26th Jan)
-Night Visitor- Pippiedooda (26th Jan)
-Christmas Magic-Rosey Unicorn (27th Jan)
-Unzipped I- Hannah (27th Jan)
-Unzipped II-Hannah (27th Jan)
-Unzipped III-Hannah (28th Jan)
-Trapped- asxz (29th Jan)
-Split personalities (30 Jan)
-Split personalities part 2 (feb 1)
-Split personalities part 3 (feb 2)
-Prince of Janovia chapter one part 1 (feb 4)
-Prince of Janovia chapter one part 2 -BeckiW(feb 5)
-Gaea 1-8- Excalibur (21-23 Feb)
-Shepard's Lamb-Maki-Chan (25 Feb)
-The Fairies Gift- Rosey Unicorn (25 Feb)
-For the Girls chapter two- Moriah Leila (25 Feb)
-You kept me alive- My Sunshine (1st March)
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So you know where your story is in the line.

So, any requests?

topic36822.html

topic37326.html

topic37980.html

They're 1, 2 and 3, btw, thankyou please.

prologue and chapter 1 need reviews ^_^


topic35779.html - prologue

topic35820.html -chapter 1

post412171.html

topic38364.html

Both of them aren't necessarily posted by chapters, but oh well... Thanks in advance.

www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic38422.html

(Chapter Eight of Eight)
Fantasy
you're welcome to read the first seven too, but no review on those, just eight thanks!


thankyou


---Jon---

Hey. Could you please review this for me? It'd be greatly appreciated. Just remember to read the link first, okay? =]

topic38505.html

Thanks a bunch!

Shhesh.
You people suck at asking for reviews.

You either have to make them feel appreciatted, or simply scare the pants off them.


Observe:


Hey nutty..

I know you're oh so busy being lord fantastitcal and you deserve a medal for your face's perfection which you have yet to get, but would it be possible to have a little review from you?

Oh and if you don't, I'll rip your eyes out, feed them to a parrot, and then crush you with a big yellow crane.


Thanks in advance.

Name: The Method of madness
Genre: Action/adventure
Summary: I guess it's sort of a psychological study of what is debatably a mad person.
Word Count: lots? Less than four thousand at any rate...
Link: topic38538.html

Please review these:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic36987.html This shouldn't be prologue

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic34323.html The mansion chapter 1

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic35415.html The mansion chapter 2

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic34985.html The ripper prologue

topic39240.html
Hahah I've got a huge lack of reviews, Sarah reviewed it and her's is amazing but I need more
Thanks so much (you don't have to review if you don't want to )
Kirsten x

Ha, well, sense you offered you can review my little short romance piece. Thanks.

post459618.html#459618

Finally, I have that lot finished. ><; Sorry to those who had delayed reviews, I had things pop up.
Anyway, anyone else have any requests?

topic39909.html

It's the first part, I haven't posted the rest yet, but it's kind of introductory, so I just really need help on descriptions, wording, etc. Thanks a lot!

Pleased to meet you, Nutty
I'm anti-pop

Here's something I'm going to submit in a contest and I want to make sure it's as good as it can get!
topic40024.html
It's a romance and kinda sad. Just a heads-up.

Thanks a bunch!


*anti-pop

Okay, those two are done and dusted. Any more?

topic40125.html

I'm trying to get a better view of what I need to work on in my writing style by getting a few more critiques on this piece. Point out any places I need to spend more time on an idea, slow down in my change in topic or generally loose the reader. And anything you like. Let's not leave that out.

Please and thank you!