Reviews greatly appreciated!

I could really use some help. I'm struggling with it, a lot. It's a little cheesy, but I'm trying to move past that. Anyone who is willing to give me the smallest bit of advice would be a tremendous help.

I will reward you with food high in carbs!

Chapter one:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33532.html

Chapter two:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33542.html

Chapter three:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33991.html

Thank you!

xoxo,

Shannon

Hello, I am one of the res crew mods here on YWS. This is a message just to inform you that I will lock and archive this thread as it is not active anymore. We have to archive and lock the inactive threads to keep the forum organized so no worries, if you'd like to reopen it at any point in the future please contact a current resources moderator, we would be happy to reopen it for you ^-^

-Alice