Anybody want a Critique?

Okay, I know that there's so many of these threads that there should be a whole forum for them, but the holidays are coming up, and that equals boredem, plus I want another star, which means I need to do another 47 crit's.

So if you want a critique, please let me know here. Just a note, I don't do Action or Romance. I can do poetry, but it's not my strong point.

I will be forever grateful if you give me pieces to critique.

Ok, I know you said no romance, but right now 'Kidnapped' hasn't got any romance happening yet (just plot and character development, really). Plus, due to the fact my early critiques weren't writers, it needs a lot of help.

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Chapter Two: topic27180.html

They're pretty short, not DoaV length at all. =P

And, of course, because I am a nag (and have nothing else up =P): Have you read DoaV's new prologue? XD

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Heck yes! I would love a critique.

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Thanks!

Well, Vernon asked me once whether I could take a look at his 'Chasing Rainbows' but I never actually got around to it. I'm also not very good at prose. So, since you're so eager, here's chapter one-

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The storyline is pretty good and he's managed to do 22(?) chapters but he's got a few grammaticals. And if you get hooked you could do the whole thing......cheers;D

-The Plant

> NN -- Prologue: Black Water, Red Flame

Thanks so much!

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have at it. XD

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I'd love a critique on Gay is My Ex.

Thanks!

I'd LOVE you if you gave me one!

'For Matty' in Other
and/or
'Reality' in Other (about to be edited, could use some critiques before I do so.)

Thanks a zillion!

~JFW1415

yes please. **puppy dog eyes**

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Well, I have three left that I have to do. Please post more! I want another star, which means I need about 30 more critiques.

Mine is some what romantic poetry... but here's the link

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I've done all my critiques apart from OverEasy's (I'll do it later today). After that I'll be done, unless you post more piece's for me to critique. I would be forever grateful if you could. It's not like it's hard. Just choose a piece and post the link in here.

Hi Chocoholic:)
I was wondering if you'd care to take a peek at my story Wyndolyn. It's been reviewed/revised once but no ones reviewing my new piece I want to know if it's any better than the previous one or if it's still terrible... It's Fantasy Fiction and rated PG.
~Dakota

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Hi Chocoholic! Here it is. Please rip it to shreds! Thanks!

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